All Comments on 'Listening When I Shouldn't'

by Bazzza

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Oatmeal1969Oatmeal1969about 1 year ago

I really like the message behind this story, sex isn't as good without love. It's exactly how I feel. Well done!

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

What is it with most of your protagonist?? They seem to ahve an unhealthy fetish of wanting to hear how their wives have had sex with other rmen… questions like- was his cock bigger then mine? Did you sick him? …and so in! How the fuck does it matter? And why would u want to hear this as a man? Are u a gay writer??? Maybe ..makes sense!

AkSh4BloOdAkSh4BloOdover 1 year ago

Very definition of pussy whipped.

Pig in the puddle..

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Two people who have strived over decades to remain so immature, even after raising children together, deserve to remain in their dysfunctional marriage. Without professional assistance, the likelihood a man or woman in their 40s or older will show lasting change in their character, except in response to an illness or a severely traumatic event, is essentially zero. The characters in this sad tale will return the to their usual melodrama in short order.

SystemShockSystemShockabout 2 years ago

So, she's an absolute cunt to him for months, rebuffs any attempt at intimacy, then has the nerve to get mad when he does exactly what she told him to. Personally, I would've started divorce proceedings, if only to put the scare in her and force a desperately needed conversation. Be we already know that our "hero" doesn't have the smarts or the spine to do such things.

While there is an element of tit-for-tat that theoretically puts them on even ground now, in reality what she did is a very different animal. He went out and paid a hooker; he did it away from home, with someone he'll never see or interact with again, and it was just sex. She, on the other hand, went out on a date, brought her lover home, fucked him in the marital bed, and did it all with someone she sees on a regular basis(enough that he's asked her out several times before). Not to mention the premeditated nature of her fling. There's a world of difference in those actions.

irinmikeirinmikeabout 2 years ago

A well done simple story. Sometimes you have to fumble around out there to realize what you have at home.

nixroxnixroxabout 2 years ago

0 stars - what a load of crap.

I am ex-military and my wife would never, ever try something stupid like that, because she knows that the man would need a stretcher and an ambulance, the instant he put one foot inside the front doorway.

Pasqual_ClementePasqual_Clementeover 2 years ago

An okay story of drifting apart and interconnecting. What rubbed me the wrong way was Janet bringing her 'date' to the house. That is disrespectful ti the max. I understand why the author wrote it that way, as a catalyst for their reconciliation, still the idea just bothers me.

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Janet's reaction to hubby looking for relief elsewhere seems so stereotypical of women. Upon his revelation, she says she did not mean it. Did not mean it!?!?!? WTF!?!? He prepares a romantic dinner and she sneers at it and tells him to go elsewhere. It sure sounded like she meant it. I guess stereotypes are stereotypes for a reason.

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Pasqual

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Disgusting shit

silentsoundsilentsoundover 2 years ago

Gay shit.

The bitch cuts him off and insults him while telling him to get it elsewhere.

She caused it and even decides to bring a coworker home to fuck?

Why did you write an absolutely brain dead woman?

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Why should he apologize? She refused all of his romantic efforts!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

"She looked at me with cool eyes and suggested that I should get my sex from somewhere else, food, wine and candles just didn't cut the mustard anymore. That was the night I gave up on our marriage."

Nope, the cunt wife had given up on her marriage. When women tell husbands they don't want sex any more they actually mean they just don't wont sex any more with their husband.

At that point the marriage is dead. The relationship has reached its expiration date.

“You can spend minutes, hours, days, weeks, or even months over-analyzing a situation; trying to put the pieces together, justifying what could've, would've happened... or you can just leave the pieces on the floor and move the fuck on.”

Just_WordsJust_Wordsalmost 3 years ago

All that pain is so easy to avoid if you want to avoid it. Perhaps every older married couple can see themselves in the start of the story, but make better choices. That's a huge amount of destruction they need to fix and it was all avoidable if they only looked at themselves and thought about what was important.

26thNC26thNCabout 3 years ago

Both are cheaters, and she even brought a guy to their home. That would be hard to forget. Maybe they make it. Maybe not.

theVikingSailortheVikingSailorabout 3 years ago

Excellent. I especially liked the character development of your protagonist. Also, the description of the marriage and development of their problems was realistic. Unlike a few of your critics, I also think that the couple's mutual discovery of how and why things came to where they reached their crossroads was well-written as was the solution they found. (To the critics: all endings in real life do not turn out to be unhappy. Why do some of you insist on a one size fits all outcome to problems within marriages? Have any of you experienced real love and real forgiveness?) One criticism: did we ever learn the husband's name? I don't think I found it. Maybe I missed it.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
WOW

Too easy 1 star WIMP story.

looking4itlooking4itover 3 years ago

I like to read the comments on stories; sometimes they are more entertaining than the actual story. Not necessarily in this case but often. I thought this well written given the length. I will agree with some that the dinner episode where she blew him off as equating a nice romantic dinner meaning a trip to the bedroom would have been enough for me to file and move on the next day. That, however, doesn’t mean it is the only reaction and that is where I laugh at many of the comments...those people who think their reaction is the only rational one are the same self important “centers of the universe” that cause me to honk my car horn often in big city traffic. It is obvious that this couple were subconsciously searching for a way to stay together but didn’t have a clue how to do that or even that is truly what they needed to do. No recriminations from either of them, simply consciously doing what they felt like they needed to do but done with reservation that they couldn’t put a logical reasoning to. That is until they both understood the depth of their feelings for one another and put the past behind them and a recombined future ahead of them.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
I wish I could give zero

Worst story on lw. Only a fool would stay, especially after that comment about the candlelight dinner. I would also meet the guy at the door with a gun. If she complained I just tell her to leave with him.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
To anony from 5 6 20

I'm happy for you that you have never felt the sting of betrayal, or being told your partner isn't interested in you anymore, or that your spouse feels the need to have sex with another man. So anony, thank your lucky stars but dont judge others until you have been there.

Just_WordsJust_Wordsover 3 years ago
I can see this happening.

It's vile on several levels and horribly avoidable, but I can see it happening. The story telling was good. The emotions were real. What do they say about needing to hit bottom before you can begin the climb back up? Self-aware people avoid that, but others do not. While I can see this happening, I think the level of pain would be far greater and longer lasting than described here. They did an excellent job of killing everything.

Just_WordsJust_Wordsalmost 4 years ago
She has no respect for him.

On my way out I would take a knife to her clothes and slice all of them. Scary, but I think it would express the pain and betrayal. I would never keep her as a wife.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
She Ended It

She Killed that Marriage .. If My Wife told Me that No More Sex from Her .. I would be looking for some strange also ..

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
To you pathetic anonymous commenters....

I feel sorry for you, as you obviously have never had the experience of being truly in love. Thanks for the story,

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
UGH!!!

REALLY!! You really are pathetic!

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
She was bored with her husband.

Divorce would have been better. She would be bored soon agsin.

MormonJackMormonJackabout 5 years ago
I liked it - very real to me

Sad that so many think it's not a good story. I liked it a lot. Very close to my own experiences.

LonesomeBoy60LonesomeBoy60about 5 years ago
Weak!

What a "F-in" fool!

MichaelFitzgeraldMichaelFitzgeraldover 5 years ago
How many times do you get sideways ...

... with your spouse? For most of us, all the time. I loved this classic and the way this couple talk with each other. Real, honest, vulnerable, there in the moment. I could relate. Well done.

widowedidiotwidowedidiotalmost 6 years ago
Wife?

I had something similar happen to me. Our sex life had come to zero. When I tried talking to my late wife, she said the same. "If you need it so bad! find somebody to do it with." I never did it, but I gave her the impression that I had. She did her bit of crying and playing the offended one. She accused me of all kind of things. finally after about three weeks she announced that since I had stepped out on our marriage she was doing the same. She already had a date lined up, she told me. Things changed when she saw me packing my bags. She didn'r want me to leave. She wanted to talk. I asked her. "How long has this been going on?" She acted surprised that I would think that of her. I told her that I might not be the sharpest knife of the set but that I wasn'r stupid. and to stop treating me like an idiot. I told her that I knew what she was trying to do since the day she told me to find it somewhere else. she was just trying to make it to where she didn't have to hide from me. I left, and stayed away for about three years. I found several women that I would see on a regular basis just nothing serious. Eventually we got back together. she told me that she had been seeing the guy for sometime and he had suggested to her the stopping of sex and then telling me to go somewhere for it. then after I did it she could get her revenge on me with him. She broke it off with him that night I left. and she told me that even though things had been getting heavy with them she never did the actual act with him. Even onto her death bed she swore that she had not done the deed with him or anybody else while she had been married to me. Well I lost my love for her that night before I walked away. Just the Idea of what she wanted to do killed it. The only reason I went back with her was because of out four kids. If she had only told me up front that she wanted to try someone else instead of her trickery, I'm stupid enough that I might just have given her permission. and still love her till her dying days. Oh! she knew, she even asked me several times. Why I didn't love her anymore.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Ignore the idiot critics.

Well done. Believable. Well developed. Thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Too stupid to read

Save your time. Do not bother with this tripe.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
They call this

EHS or "Empty Head Syndrome." ... It is usually fatal, I'm afraid.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Total lack of respect

Why is the wife's complete and utter lack of respect for her husband ever mentioned, not even by the husband himself? Yes, he got the ball rolling by fucking prostitutes, but he at least had the decency not to shit where he ate and kept it out of the homestead. But the wife can't even clear that low bar and just HAS to bring her boyfriend home. Even knowing her husband will be there, she never so much as entertains the idea of doing it somewhere else, and in fact complains about him inconveniencing her.

If it's a matter of her being comfortable with her surroundings, the fact that she'd be "comfortable" fucking another man in the family home says quite a bit about her character, and it's nothing good. A lot of so-called "open marriages" even have it as an explicit rule that neither spouse can bring a "playmate" into the shared home. Even if they don't value marital fidelity, they at least value and protect the sanctity of their home.

If I were in the husband's shoes, no matter how much I loved the bitch, her NEED to defile and taint our home forever would stick in my craw. If nothing else, it shows a not-insignificant amount of disdain lurking just beneath the surface. I don't think I'd be able to spend the rest of my life wondering when it would come out again, and what she'd do if it did. Not as bad as a wife with severe anger issues who might stab you in your sleep in a fit of rage, but not a whole lot better, either.

RuttweilerRuttweilerover 6 years ago
Well done

I find the characters and story are believable and enjoyable. The somewhat quirky behavior of the male lead strikes me a being within the bounds of realistic human behavior, making the story ring true. I'm glad that these characters have overcome their fears and flaws and found each other again, and have the courage to reach out once more. Much happiness for them going forward.

Five *****.

Rutty

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
lost and unneeded

That comment in story's beginning makes little sense.

Yes the children were out of the house but she was not a stay at home mom

I shake my head when hear or read empty nest-even if she was stay at home mom.

In today's world so many options exist for such wives...volunteering, continuing education...

Finding something to do would be just a matter of looking

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago

He is less than a man.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
sorry to those who liked story

Wife made it clear she was through with husband. If not for financial situation they would have divorced at her request.

One commenter castigates those who take issue with wife as being selfish and never having been in love.

That comment describes wife perfectly.

She could have postponed lover's visit until husband's car was fixed. The fact that she did not defines her intent and her character!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Dammit!

I realize it's just fiction but this story pissed me off. She told him straight out to get his sex elsewhere so he did. So she went out and dragged some poor idiot back to her house to screw while her husband was there. Just for spite, it seemed. That's not just low-class and disrespectful but it's also dangerous. In my world hubby would have been applauded for kicking the shit out of lover-boy and ejecting "L. B" and (former) wife from his home.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
No Love Here

She humiliated her husband. He needed to pack his bags and leave the cheating bitch. No shame in doing that..let her fend for herself.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Some of you that commented obviously have never been really in love with another.

It's easy to see why. It's all about you, isn't it. Until that changes, you'll never really know what being in love is or means.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

I seldom agree with HarryinVA.

But, he analyzed this perfectly.

Good job, Harry

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Pretty good

I think its a version of reality. It could happen that way. shouldn't be at all that quick to judge, human are always complicated.

rightbankrightbankalmost 8 years ago
voyeur suggests a watcher

is there a term for a listening?

rightbankrightbankalmost 8 years ago
an honest depiction of how two people can drift apart

complacency and neglect can be fatal to a marriage.

As the comments attest, the ending is not for everyone, but hopefully it is best for the principals in this drama.

Thanks for stirring up doubts, inspiring regrets, introspection and reflection.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
A touch of realism

The drifting apart and the mistakes made by both husband and wife were very believable, although the use of their home for the 'experiment' was a bit OTT, but then it is a story after all. Then the use of low tech baby monitors rather than complicated gismo's was realistic. It was a good story, but then I'm a sucker for a happy ending !

carvohicarvohialmost 9 years ago
Golly!

I don't know how I missed this one, and the comments were great. I found out all about Ohio, like wow!

Two things of interest to me: one was the primitive technology that attended the story, and second the score is abysmally low for something this good. I rated it a five, and feel it was Hall of Fame caliber.

retmstrretmstralmost 9 years ago
****

It's nice to read about two grownups growing up. I enjoyed your story, Bazzza. Cheers!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Good story and plot!

Speaking of plots dear annony you should be in one. Gave it a5!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Great story

Thanks

sugnasugnaover 9 years ago
What Changed?

For her to cut him off and treat him like shit and him to be so angry and desperate to go to a dirty hooker tells you a lot about how "close" they were and what a "good" marriage they had. I highly doubt they ever had a great marriage. What they had was the inertia of raising kids. When that was done, there was nothing left and apparently she didn't want to make the effort to renovate their marriage. So the shit treatment, the stupid reaction and more stupidity on both their parts. In the end, what changed? They were still the same people but they had covered themselves in mud like fools. No, there was no love, there was just loneliness, desperation, humiliation and fear. What a life!

impo_60impo_60over 9 years ago
Good story...

Good story...4* for love triumph in the end...

connoisseur29connoisseur29over 9 years ago
***

When she told him to get laid elsewhere he should have pulled the plug. If he started the ball rolling towards divorce, MAYBE she'd have come around in time to save it all. What a waste of years. Good writing and reading but lousy story. Cheers!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
SUCKER

SUCKER

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
LOL 5 stars , for the story & 5 stars for the BTB vitriolic comments

HEY

He goes out and fucks Hookers while Married.

She brings someone home long AFTER they have decided to go their seperate ways & get divorced ...... at that point they are living as room mates ...

and somehow those events combine to make them both realise what bloody idiots they have been & allows them to repair their marriage.

He is a cheater , he ain't a cuck ..

She is not a cheater ...

get a brain , grow some balls ....

don't be a pussy " think " for a change .

xxxhugsxxx

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Hubris

I am not the type of reader who screams "cuck, cuck, cuck", but this story, much like MATT M Separate Vacations which really should have been named The Bitch's Vacation just plain sucks. A narcissist wife who has no respect for her spouse. I've been married 35 years, 10 yrs 1st wife 25 yrs 2nd wife. Never did even my 1st wife show such a lack of respect. This guy should find his balls and Rename this "When I retained my manhood and hit the road." If she didn't mean her comment about him needing to find sex elsewhere she should dropped to her knees 1st light next day, deepthroated him, swallowed every drop and begged for forgiveness. For the unforgivable act of bringing back her fuck buddy to the house she should permanent marker BITCH on her forward. This story isn't romantic it emasculating.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago

Not badly written at all, in fact this is a decent story from a technical point of view. What I don't like is the content and your conclusion. It's one thing to go out and hire a hooker for an hour or a night and the husband should deservedly be fucked up the ass for that, metaphorically speaking. It's a whole other thing to bring the lover into the shared home, however. In my mind, these two different sexual acts create a real imbalance and if the husband wasn't a bit of a wimp, the relationship would never be able to be mended after that.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Just a Minute

They get irritable with each other and then he realized that they need to work things out and she shines him on! His dinner is rebuffed by her as a complete nothing and she tells hum to get sex elsewhere. Instead of chasing women and a relationship, he buys sex twice and she gets up tight about it...huh, what did she think was going to happen.

Now she decides to date and have sex with a colleague who has been courting her and she wants to have a relationship (sex included) with him and she goes ahead with it!

Well, too bad it wasn't any good. She pushed hubby away, told him to get laid elsewhere and allowed a seducer to have relations with her and when it doesn't excite her she decides, better keep hubby dummy!

You're good Bazza but it doesn't wash. Mentally she killed her husband, he tried and she, without any consideration for him, went ahead and sexually dated. SAD, but this marriage would have been over.

I enjoy your writings and this one right up to where and when she went down on Rob and then...DONE!!!...To me...Wrong Ending and I don't think he had to burn her - Just Leave!

Thanks anyway!

Mustang88LXMustang88LXover 10 years ago
That was pretty dam good

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Wrong title

It should have been "Not Listening When I should Have." If he had done that he would not have found himself in this position.

phil2213phil2213almost 11 years ago
Enjoyable emptynester saga with happy ending!

I enjoyed the story with the empty nesters looking for meaning back in their lives.

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveover 11 years ago
Uncertain

I'm not sure that the circumstances of this tale would have led them to the conclusion reached. Well written, however unrealistic.

There's my two cents.

HA

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Written Well

When he prepared a special meal with all the trimmings and she turned him down and told him to go elsewhere - sadly done! That is when they should have talked.

Telling him to get it elsewhere and he finally did and told her - not vengefull, just remorse and besides - there wasn't ny love making.

Now, she goes on a date and then brings a guy home to make love - a whole different emotion with this, this is romance and love making - not a quick 50 for an emotionless fuck.

So, you wrote a decent ending and the story was well done but - in real life, when they drifted and got sex elsewhere - no respect for each other, their former life or their vows - all over!

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Huedogg is DWornock

Comments are too similar, or maybe husband/wife troll team, brother/sister?

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

When she gave up..then she gets perturbed over what her did? Would have been more interesting for them to go their separate ways .....regret and burned bridges.

JLRemoraJLRemoraover 12 years ago
Weeds and grass, no distinction

I'm not into cuckold stories, but this one is different enough to warrant two readings. The first was to get the essence of the story and the second was to determine the validity of the relationship.

People are screwed up. It doesn't matter how much money they make, how much power they have, and how well they are raised. We are all very screwed up individuals. This story is just a small, very small, slice of that life. There are no perfect marriages, nor perfect relationships, no perfect people. Because of that, it's a struggle of conscience, a debate with doubt, and the uncertainty of trust when we love someone and they do us wrong.

This well written story is a perfect example of just how screwed up we are and cuts to the heart of the matter.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
"cuckjordan" liked it

So I did too - we cucks must stick together or our supply of creampies will become extinct

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
just stupid

He made an effort and rebuked, and that was pivotal. Then there is her reaction to get what she does not give, and who is miffed? The financial reasons were a sham, given your end. It seems better to just part and leave with the memories, as they were. The issues were deeper than just empty nest, and he should have left her at the initial point,for both their sake.

rjordanrjordanalmost 13 years ago
Very nice

A very human story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Not to worry.

Eventually she will serve him some more juicy creampies. I did not like the story.

Zeb40Zeb40over 14 years ago
Forget about Rob.

If Rob had been the greatest lover in the world, it wouldn't have made a difference. There was no emotional connection,ergo, no real enjoyment. Pride and stubbornness are powerful negatives in a relationship. Both are guilty here. For once, we see a couple here who come to their senses, albeit almost too late. They've made major mistakes, but they have raised their children and had a basically good marriage. Why shouldn't they get back together. They're flawed, but so what. Aren't we all. Good story. Paul

TE_RossTE_Rossover 14 years ago
Oh what fools...

<p>From the moment the husband wrote of his frustration, infidelities and confession, this became a truly sad story for me. I wasn't sure if his wife could hurt him any worse than he had hurt himself. Perhaps that is why his forgiveness came so easily; it was a way of absolving himself.</p>

<p>The happy ending came at a very high price for them both. Thanks for sharing this story with us.</p>

Ducky7Ducky7over 14 years ago
Well was it really cheating, for both of them.

Good story. well written, loving and marriage take a lot of work. THX

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Oh Shut Up...

with your miserable misogynist rantings. Just accept that other people's relationships can be stronger than you like to her about - presumably because it makes you feel a right prat for having fucked up your own.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Silly reconciliation at any cost story.

She is the one that closed down the marriage and refused sex. She is the one that destroyed a dinner and told him to get sex elsewhere. She is the one that made a date with a coworker to fuck and told that coworker she had an ex. And suddenly he loves the slut and wants to make love to her. Get a grip! This is sci fi fantasy with no relationship to reality. It would never have gotten to the prostitutes with me. Her attitude would have been enough for the to ditch her along the way. Finances hell, without love and a life what the hell do finances mean? This idiot woman needed to have been ditched long before she planned to become an adulterer with her own life. Women about to lose their lifestyle will say or do anything to keep it including say it meant nothing, I love only you, and I will be faithful I have learned my lesson.

PhilipinNorcalPhilipinNorcalover 14 years ago
Plausible and pleasant

Bazzza: Your story held my interest throughout, which is an experience I have less and less around here. This couple became complacent and let their relationship become stagnant. Flavor this discord with pride and stubbornness, and these folks are in real trouble.</p>The wife was definitely hitting below the belt with her comment that a candlelit dinner was not going to literally sweep her off her feet, but I really believe at that point much hurt had already been inflicted by each on the other. Her threat of no sex was no doubt one of a number of bitter remarks that they had already directed at each other. Much more than a romantic dinner would be required to heal this schism.<p>To find one of this couple more culpable for blame than the other is foolish. I have no doubt that hurtful exchanges were commonplace in their marriage. But it does give me pause that the husband is the one who self-admittedly <i>gave up</i> on the marriage and who crossed that uncrossable line first. Both husband and wife here share much guilt and shame.<p>Bazzza, the actions and words of your protagonists exuded authenticity. I've met and known some couples who pretty much mirror the folks in your story. It's a tale which occurs much too often and less frequently has the credible reconciliation as did your story. With many thanks for a pleasant read Philip

The NavigatorThe Navigatorover 14 years ago
Another winner

First, Bazzza, you should be pleased to see how many readers took the time to express their feelings about your story. Feelings both good and bad, or perhaps positive and negative. That indicates you aroused them. Many writers cannot. <p> Second, some well known and accomplished writers have just favorably commented on this story. You can't received better rewards than that. <p> Finally, I always look forward to your stories because they are so well written, entertaining, and just the right length. It takes considerable skill to develop characters in just a few words. You show it to be both an art and a science. <p> Keeps them coming!

Blue88Blue88over 14 years ago
Well Done

Well done. I enjoyed this tale, it had the bite of realism that raised it above the mundane. Tip of the hat to the author.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
25

25

bruce22bruce22over 14 years ago
Moving Story

Fascinating comments, but I have to admit that the author is a powerful writer. For this reason I gave the story a 5 where it counts.... But I can't really bring myself that I loved the story.. It was too painful and too real...

I feel bad about what happened in the story and really do not see what a husband could have done in this case. Obviously escorts was not the answer, but being nice also failed. Maybe this was the only, potentially disastrous way back.

Scorpio44Scorpio44over 14 years ago
What we have here is a failure to communicate...

until almost too late. They both made mistakes, and common ones. Forgetting to be lovers along the way and letting kids and jobs get in the way of being partners and lovers were their sins. Well written. Nicely done. Thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
This Is No Fairy Tale

This is the way that two mature adults, who have a deep love for each other which does get submerged at times by other issues in life, come back together in the closest intimacy that we humans enjoy. "Write or Right On", Bazzza! You hit the target on this one.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Too far

She TOLD him to get his sex elsewhere after refusing him, he did nothing wrong. She brought another man into their house......their house. He is a weak ass pussy. She should have left. I should be inserted into the story, go to their house and brutally murder them both.

katibkatibover 14 years ago
Love Wins

Enjoyable story; happy ending. Love wins. Congratulatiions

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Loved it

Excellent story. I don't know why another "writer" the "lancegt" is advertizing his "story" Well, no one is interested to know about your "story" To the author good job.

lance gtlance gtover 14 years ago
My apologies

I saw your comment to Lance and assumed it was directed back at me. It seems we both feel the same about your comments and how you rate them. I read through all of them to get an understanding of how this tirade formed and shades of my story re-appeared. As writers, we try our best, as Bazzza has done, to entertain the readers with a story. Whether it smacks of reality or comes across as absurdly outrageous, is the writers choice to present it. If the reader can't fathom that this is just a work of fiction and takes it to heart, then who is to blame for the reaction. It seems readers who post negative feedback about the content, rather than the intent, must have felt it hit close to home in their own lives. Maybe they are looking for answers to their own problemed lives and didn't find it in the story. Lance

lance gtlance gtover 14 years ago
Ummmmm?

Harry, this isn't my story, it's Bazzza's. I know you might be rebutting what I said about you earlier, but it is just a story after all. Whether things like this happen in real life or not, doesn't really come into play. Bazzza's just using his imagination and writing talents to take things to a different level, one I feel entertains the readers more than a realistic one. As for me, I have taken your comments to heart on my story 'The Usual' and have re-written it and it is now ready for posting. I'd like your opinion on the new version and post that on Feedback. LanceGT

nyminusnyminusover 14 years ago
Have to say that I liked it. There are wimp husban

and whore wives. There was neither here

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
another man

i like the story, but for her to take another man into their home when she knew her husband was there is totally disrespectful and wouldn't happen with anybody i know.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
another man

i like the story, but for her to take another man into their home when she knew her husband was there is totally disrespectful and wouldn't happen with anybody i know.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Loved it

Rare for me to give a hundred. Rare for me to reward a cheater in any way, but it was a treat to see the way this worked out. Maybe a fairy tale, but much better than two good people throwing away 25 years of a living and working relationship.

Harryin VAHarryin VAover 14 years ago
Lance

your view of how I see things is unfair. Maybe its me... this story strikes a DEEP nerve because I have seen this sort of Behavior from WIFE/ women a LOT.

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an awful lot. and it is MOSTLY the wife's fault.

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IF you really think Both sides are at fault... If it is true that I am viewing things too Black and white... then can you please explain to me why no one else has focused the impact of cutting off the husband emotionlly and sexually?

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WHY is that sort of behavior acceptable?

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In this case it seems to me the wife decided to try someone else because she wanted revenge on her husband has sex with two escorts. In this story there was NO focus on at all about how mean twisted and nasty the wife had become.

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if a wife falls out of love... which of course happens... does that behavior justify ANY action the wife does?

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
What about Rob? ? ?

Some retribution is needed here...Maybe a baseball bat to the knees or a 5 iron to the groin...He knew she was a married woman and should have to pay with PAIN for his actions!

kelly_kellykelly_kellyover 14 years ago
I wanted to give 75, BUT

I'm giving 100 for all the<b><b/>Saucy, Entertaining, Funny and Interesting<b><b/> comments. <p>Enjoyed everything here. Thank you <b><b/> ALL<b/> for the entertainment =))

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Great Story!!!

Relationships change because we change and this story illustrated that wonderfully. Yes, they took each other for granted, but they discovered taht the grass isn't greener on the other side.

lancewmlancewmover 14 years ago
Interesting and compelling story

Marriages and people are complicated. The author did well telling the story of two complicated people. Whether I agree with their actions is irrelevant. If the writer does a good job describing people unlike myself, so be it and good for him/her. BTW - HIV analyzes stories as though people are uncomplicated robots. "She did this, so he should do this... He did this so she should do this... This happened so therefore the marriage is over...." I am pleased people are more complicated, loving and foregiving than HIV would have us believe.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Good!

Gray, Blue, White, Black, whatever. situations happen. people do get stupid and deserve some beatings. that's life. either learn or sink in a quagmire.

ohioohioover 14 years ago
Harry and HDK:

To Harry: I give out 100s to stories I like and enjoy, or at least respect and find interesting. It's true that I tend not to give lower scores--if I dislike a story or find it boring, I don't vote at all. As an author myself, I respect all those who work to entertain the rest of us, and I feel no need to vote a low score or comment negatively on anyone's work. That's just my personal choice; others can do as they please.

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To HDK: How on earth did you find out about my family background? It's actually more complicated than you indicated: my parents were siblings as a result of sperm and then egg donation by an anonymous, transgendered donor (first a man, later a woman). And they raised me (along with my brother and sisters) in a cave in a large zoo in a depressed midwestern city. That explains my lifelong preference for raw meat, as well as for cotton candy (which visitors to the zoo used to throw down to us).

Harryin VAHarryin VAover 14 years ago
HDK

if every score that one hands out is ALWAYS a 100 the value & impact of giving out A 100 kind of gets lost or dilluted... no?

cageyteecageyteeover 14 years ago
I enjoyed it!

We need a few different approaches in LW and as far as I have read what's available, this has a uniqueness. I appreciate Bazzza's time, energy and talent that he puts into entertaining us.

HarddaysknightHarddaysknightover 14 years ago
What is wrong with Ohio? Good question!

There are many things. His parents were siblings. Both had sex changes before he was born, and it was a very difficult birth. He doesn't understand if the reader doesn't approve of the actions of a character in a story, the story is absolutely no damn good. He thinks a writer gives the characters life, and directs their actions in the story. He appreciates the efforts made by writers to entertain readers. He understands that it isn't easy to post something and have insults hurled at him for writing the story. He tries to be positive and comment only on stories he likes. He has yet to learn that when his opinion differs from some other readers.... he is wrong, and he truly is a dumb fuck!

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