All Comments on 'Little Lips'

Nice, a slow build up to some good sex, some editing would improve the overall pace, a few typo's and juxtaposition errors but very readable.

This story is magnificent. I can't wait for another chapter

Very, very nice. But it feels incomplete. I do hope you consider furthering their adventures.

didn't read entire thing . only bits only pieces only pieces only bits .

NOW THAT I'VE SAID THOSE THINGS - absolute spectacle absolute perfection

absolute flawless absolut

Mac and cheese for breakfast? Just curious. Anyway, I really liked the diary entries. I feel like those were driving the action, then you abruptly turned to the dom/sub action. Perhaps, let your characters write alternating diary entries as they explore what each of them want. I was hoping he would touch Maci's delicious pussy as she pretended to sleep. That would have been amazing. Still a 5 from me. I really enjoyed the inner turmoil as it led to their consumation. Looking forward to more.

Thanks for the feedback everyone! Hopefully I will get time for a part 2.

when able i'll get back reading this time full thing . UNTIL THAN . main stuff readers gonna

want answered - - what's happened about the taxi driver guy Maci did find really hot .

what's gonna happen Sergio especially when Maci personally knows him along he does personally

know her along also he now knows what she does . Alice obviously gonna find her father her sister

sexual situation sexual situations so what kind scene so what kinda scenes she gonna bust them along also

is she gonna take part action become threesome or she gonna wait fuck father all on her own or she

gonna talk gonna actually fuck Maci her sister than decide what's next

Amazing writing and a good story. Looking forward to part 2

I need more please

Great story, you paced the slow ratcheting up of their relationship perfectly