by Lookingforthis
It has decent potential but is very rough. I look forward to future chapters and hope that you find an editor to work with.
One thing I found very disruptive was your decision to name his best friend Justine. Justine is the feminine version of Justin. I can't recall ever hearing of a (non-crossdressing) male being call Justine and even knowing the character was male was not enough to overcome the female connotations of the name.
Maybe add like a row of tilde or some other marks, between scene transitions. I'm getting a bit of whiplash, but otherwise I'm excited to see where the story goes.
>make a hmofa story
>give the human a horse cock for no fucking reason
your fetish is bad and you should feel bad
6 chapters and almost nothing has happened to make this literotica. Practically just a regular story.