All Comments on 'Liz & Mike Meet'

...unless the owner of said pussy knows diddly-squat about hygiene!

Next time try to determine if your story is written in the first or in the third person. I got the feeling this white guy was fucking not one but two black girls. Very funny considering that a story of mine was once rejected just for small matters of punctuation (period inside or outside quotation marks?)

You switch the point fo view from first to third too many times. Grammar as atrocious, and I agree with the other reviewer. You're story was confusing. Was he with two women or one?

Thanks for the comments. Writing in the 3rd party was alot more difficult than I thought. I'll have to work on that.