All Comments on 'Long Distance Wishes'

A bit of an anticlimax. Four pages of build up, then it's all over in two paragraphs.

Amazing build up. Great dialogue, like I could imagine these conversations and interactions. It all felt very real. Loved the teasing. However, I would like to see a better ending. Especially when they both finish for the first time together and it's her first time. I want a whole paragraph dedicated to her experiencing that for the first time. Not done in one second. Great story, nonetheless! Such a tease tho lol

What nonsense....4 pages of garbage that can be condensed into a couple of paras!!

TRASH WRITING