All Comments on 'Lost Island Harem'

OK so this is such a good idea but you need to work on writing skills. Slow down and describe the acts. Plan out multiple scenes and the describe them. Slowly. Also, maybe use spell and grammar check. Airplane is shortened as plane, not plain. Its distracting for your reader.

I really do appreciate the critiques you guys have given me. I am Dyslexic so I sometimes have a hard time with editing. The corrections have been kind and helpful. They have not been cruel or hurtful. Thank you for being understanding and enjoying my stories. I couldn't get better without you guys helping me.

This is my dream fantasy