All Comments on 'Lost to Lust Pt. 01'

What the fuck?

Waiting for ch. 2.

Calling this shit would be generous.

Part two unnecessary. Really awful.

Sentences and paragraphs are poorly organized

I did notice that this writer seems to be a bit of a fashion aficionado. I seldom read a short story where the clothing is described so well. I don't care about that and I never felt other readers cared either.

"She was dressed in a simple crop-top sleeveless blouse, buttoned tight under her boobs. Bare midriff. Denim shorts, fairly tight. Long legs. Tennies on her feet. A purse on a long strap, balanced on one hip."

"she was wearing one of my favorite front-zip little black dresses and a pair of Come-Fuck-Me pumps, with close-net, thigh-high stockings. The dress was fully lined (I know, because I bought it for her last year), so I also knew she was braless and wore no panties underneath it."

How many guys would bother to mention that a dress was lined, would care that it was lined, and would even know what the hell that even meant? This entire story was like a quick trip into the twilight zone.

we really will believe she was a whore with a "heart of gold", who was maybe raped at the conference and went hormonally bonkers? Not a chance, I don't care how much money she is willing to him after her death.

5* MAGA!!!!

very bad 0*

So a girl shows up and offers herself sexually and explicitly to a man she’s never seen or talked to, and tells him she wants bareback sex and he goes for it?

Hello his ex died of AIDS!! Interesting start but you need an editor and spell check and sentence structure.

Please work this storyline out.

Good effort but the story falls short at the plot level for LW readers. It is known the LW readers are the most critical on Lit. Because most have lived most of the plots in real life. So if you write here you have to have your shit (characters) together. Keep at it

Actually looking forward to more of this...

This looks like a rehash of your Big Cock Addict part 1 and part 2.

I will read on to see if this improves on that.

another cocksucking WIMP posting dumb cuck SHIT.

Just another inexplicable Martian Slut Ray plot. Why bother?

You have a chance to use Phil McCracken as a name and you don't take it? I get that you are ESL, but that is seriously disappointing and makes you come off as a Russian troll.

On to chapter 2 though there is no mystery here.

Use of "Sex" as a verb is just plain wierd. Sex is not a verb. You dont "Sex" someone. You can "fuck" them, "make love with/to" them, "have sex" etc. Jars me right out of the story. Otherwise, it's a good intro,

I laugh my butt off thinking of how I make cucks of these men who can't find a woman who will be " faithful ." Don't blame the woman when she finds another man like me with a real dick and who knows how to fuck her, blame your attitudes and your pathetic fucking.

You actually need to crawl back in that slimy sewer you crawled out of. Praising yourself shows the type of moron you really are. You can come out of your mother's basement now and get some light, before the dark fucks up your brain completely.

a chance. GTFO!

another cocksucking WIMP posting dumb cuck SHIT.

When you love someone you don't do bad things to them. It may have salved r her conscience, but she stopped loving long time ago.

Quite a gripping story even with some of the hard to believe parts.

This was a sex-themed story. For those who still want wall-to-wall ultra-graphic sex on every page, I ask that you get a life. For those who are easily offended because I didn’t write exactly what you wanted to read, I’ll say the same thing. I also observe that the people expressing the worst, nasty, most virulent comments have—with few exceptions—either posted as anonymous or have never published a story under their screen names. Reading such comments is pointless.

Hope it gets better. The BEAR withholds approval .

The BEAR

The word ‘sex’ as a verb does not mean what you think it means. Webster it or Google it. It makes the narrator sound like an idiot.

Thank God you stopped writing.