All Comments on 'Love at First Sight'

Endearing story. I enjoyed the characters and their interactions. I'm curious about where their story goes next. - Bob from MD.

I would love to see how this plays out with Belle & Jason. They have so much more to offer. Keep up the good work & I will be looking out for the next installment of this story!!!!!

I love this story. I would like to see where else you take these characters. What they have to deal with and what comes of there relationship. I hope you keep writing.

The grammar was so poor that it was difficult to read in many spots.

It detracted from the story too much!

He stuck it up her really deep shooting his load in her now shes going to be a mummy well done

You really should continue this. I’d love to see where you take these characters and how they develop with each other as this fic progresses. And does Belle suffer any long term complications after the electrocution? Side effects along the

Pregnancy. Does her ex try and win her back and will Jason fight for her? So much potential! Please keep writing! From NZ

I am sorry I could not persevere more than a third down the first page as the grammatical errors were too distracting. You used the wrong words in places, despite sounding similar to what you obviously intended (There, Their, They're). The tense was changing almost continually, jumping from past to present and back. I think you may have a nice story under there somewhere, but it was hidden in the poor writing.

Perhaps an editor might help you to improve what you post.

If you plan on continuing writing then please get an editor. There are dozens of incorrect words used and incorrect spellings and poor grammatical structure. Plus, if "you" are the main person, why oh why do you refer to yourself in the 3rd person? It causes massive confusion and makes a POV (point of view) meaningless.

You show promise so keep up the writing but quality needs improving. Cheers.