All Comments on 'Love Dies'

As always love the Saddletramp “treatment…”. Next time though might want to something subtle like a frontal assault by the 1st Armored Division…!

5 stars

Excellent. I loved the sentence "I'm going to do everything in my power to help them bury you so deep they'll have to pipe sunlight in to you.". The ending is both historical and contemporary - alluding to the Allies bringing freedom for lovers to walk along a D Day beach. Also the use of the phrase "Niki sowed to the wind, and she reaped the whirlwind" references the Biblical phrase used by the Allies to justify bombing campaigns which meant that the Nazis had only a modicum of D Day air cover. Genius.

Thank You

If Nikki hadn't been in such a hurry for stupidity she could have hurried to court and gotten a injuction to get the rest of her belongings especially the wedding dress Man would be notified If the stupid soon to be exhusband barred the way and assaulted the deputies they would taser him multiple times then escorted her in to get her belongings If the stupid man had burned the dress and destroyed the jewelery, painting and anything else belonging to her, the judge would declare the man in contempt fine him $50,000 for the assault and sentence him to 6 years in jail He would award the women $200,000 for the loss of her property including the Paris original wedding dress. While the stupid was in jail homeless people would have entered and trashed the house from one end to the other When the stupid got out he would attacked the homeless people in the house and be place back in jail for assault and attermpted murder for 20 years hIs lawyers grew rich in his appeals and he grew poorer, when he finally got out he found his house was burned down by the homeless but he was happy his prenupt was in place so even though he was broke and a ex-criminal he sure showed the bitch

But Nikki didn't so she paid the penalties for her greed

Five, as always. I had to laugh at you admonishment to those who want researched accuracy in sentencing guidelines at a free story web site. Thanks,

Another great story from the master Time you gave us another long one Mister S T (jaybee186)

1 star and only because I can't give a minus score.

Nice story. AAAA+++

Good to see you back.

Great ending! ST1965 scores another winer.

5

Another great SaddleTramp tale ! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Awesome that sexual assault charges were included! So many authors think that it’s not a big deal to get exposed to someone else’s fluid without consent. It IS a fucking big deal, it’s a felony!!!

ZK

Good story, your editor missed a few places where you switched character's names!

Where's the ending joke?

C'mon mate, you let me down?

Regardless it was a good story of a no nonsense man handing out justice left and right.

You sure kept transposing names. Usually you do much better than that.

Blaa blaa blaa

As I have said in the past, I seldom read LW stories unless they are lite hearted Saddletramp yarns! Thanks for the read!

Cheers

SAGE

Unfortunately, not one of your best.

Couple of things. As always I like your style of writing and the way you finish things. Second, I HATE "uno-bombers" with a holy passion. My opinion is that most of them are jealous they are not able to write anything coherent so they from the comfort of their Mother's basement troll people who CAN write. End of rant. Well done again.

Possibly the best story teller around. Thanks for another interesting round.

It was fun, typical SaddleTramp deserved penalties. Only one error... "Dad explained that Niki had just moved here from Montreal."... Nikki should be Marie.

missed you,glad you back.

As always, flawless, fun, and fascinating! 5 stars.

Absolutely unbelievable! What normal husband would refuse to become a cuckold for the happiness of his beloved wife? It's so exciting, but he immediately kicked his wife out and started a divorce. If he had accepted his new role in the relationship, obeyed his wife and transferred the right to manage his finances to Ben, then there would have been no attack and attempted murder. And everyone would be happy. Stu ruined everything with his pathetic male ego and stupid stubbornness. And to condemn your beloved wife and her close friend to 50 years in prison for an innocent sexual prank is monstrous.

Stu became Ben for awhile there. This author doesn’t usually do that

He needs to ask Eric to contact her ex-husband. It is quite possible that it was Marie who had sex with half of Canada if she easily spread her legs for Stu on the first date.

"Dad explained that Niki had just moved here from Montreal, and he wondered if I wouldn't mind showing her around, maybe taking her to dinner."

Maybe it should read : "Dad explained that **Marie** had just moved here from Montreal, and he "wondered" if I wouldn't mind showing her around, maybe taking her to dinner.

I usually enjoy reading your stories. This one is not quite as good as your usual ones, maybe because the plot is not completely yours.

Honestly, it gets a 1 just for the absolutely screaming insecurity of the foreword and epilogue. Anyone that devoted to explaining how they don’t care about something has some kind of obnoxiously deep neediness.

Thought I had caught all the glitches. Guess that's what I get for working on multiple projects at once. Sorry...

Saddletramp btb 101.

Woohooo. ST comes through again. 5 ⭐️

That fiction isn't real, that's accurate otherwise it would be nonfiction. But it's not that a story is real life or a portrayal of actual events that matters. Good writing demands the appearance of truth in order for the reader to suspend disbelief. That is true regardless of genre. How well a writer uses verisimilitude in his/her work will determine whether the reader will be able to suspend disbelief and become immersed into the world created by the author. Neil Gaiman has some excellent comments and suggestions about verisimilitude on his masterclass website.

It read like painting by numbers . Felt rushed to hit all the cliche you could think of.

Honestly not even close to your normal stories where the reader gets immersed in the story

Excellent but of course I knew it would be! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

Given the limited source material you done good. Caught an error where you referred to Marie as Niki when saying she moved from Montreal. Other than that, all good.

Thanks

Nearly as bad as the original. Poor editing as well.

Boy what a disappointment. I was expecting a saddletramp btb ending for what happened to the main character

Yes, this is exactly the touch saddle tramp that this story was missing. I liked the ending even better that way.

Nice to hear from you again!

Not up to your usual standards specifically character names.

have to say I miss your (almost) weekly postings.

Three stars. Not one of your best. BTW, if Ben's house was underwater, how did he sell it for enough money to pay legal bills? Names were flipped too. Not a great effort.

A little over the top, but your stories are always entertaining!

What a refreshing read to start the day.

Your story was blah at best. You also need to get your character straight.

You mixed up Stuart with Ben and then Niki with Marie. Very sloppy for someone of your caliber.

that was a good read.

but you know you will get hit by commenters on your fiasco of the characters' names getting swapped.

but I like your style so it's 4-star from me.

rhanks mr. saddletramp.

I'm glad the protagonists in Saddle's stories don't take abuse lying down, I just can't understand the sexual appeal of cruelty. I can't understand the bad guys either, though. Why did they start the drowning but not see it through as they were present the whole time? They couldn't just give the drowned body to the police with rope burns, a lethal dose of restricted sedative, a lethal dose of cock cage, being pissed and cummed on, and claim it was a no-fault whoopsie goldberg. And that was the plan they put all of their brain juice together to invent! I enjoyed seeing the evil people get justice, but couldn't understand them as humans. Thanks for entertaining us.

OK as usual a good read or better from you. This one I rated as an Excellent Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐. I know you probably think WTF this story/tale was better than that. But I am a hard ass on ratings as you are on cheaters. All joking as side, I always enjoy your tales and the details you put in your writing. This tale was no different.

I thought the original by LovingF was a good read and gave it a Good Read ⭐⭐⭐ score. To me yours was a bit more fun to read and I enjoyed it. Thus I gave it a score of an Excellent Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐.

I always appreciate when you writers give us a good tale with imagery that is vivid and creates a believable or totally out there storyline. You take your time to weave these interesting tales. Sometimes we need to take the time to say thank you.

Oh BTW I don’t normally do this but as I am giving you a hard time you did F-up by calling Marie Niki on Pg 02 in the line, “Dad explained that Niki had just moved here from Montreal, and he "wondered" if I wouldn't mind showing her around, maybe taking her to dinner.” Now I don’t write tales/stories because if I did everyone would find probably more than 100 of these type of issues with my placement of words on a page. LOL. It is fun to poke at one of my favorite writers her on Literotica.

Thanks. Keep your mind moving forward and ideas as off the wall like always.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

Early on, Stu became Ben, and later, Marie became Niki.

This story was obviously put together very quickly, with little time spent on editing.

Some (including the Tramp) may consider this nitpicking, but these kinds of errors disrupt the flow of the story until the reader can figure out what happened. And after that, the readers' "reception" somehow becomes distorted, like a weak TV signal.

I normally look for new submissions by this author, since I have greatly enjoyed most of his past stories in the LW category. I'd like to continue anticipating their appearance, so I hope he returns to his previous standards.

No, just no.

I read Lovingf's 2 part story and it deserved the ratings it got. Your piece is an obvious BTB. Why you wrote it is a mystery.

It's an unnecessary continuation of an unnecessary tale.....

4* Not The Tramps best work. The shitbirds broke into a home with an alarm. Author confused the names of characters like Marie was called Nikki. Marie seemed to be a loose woman. The criminal sentences of the scum did help the story.

I did not get the impression that Marie and Stu "made love" the first night.

However, being in an emergency situation can trigger an action response that seems out of character. Its as if your subconsious is taking over. Ex: Try, say, a patron walking through a plate glass window? You're not going to wait for a manager to come over, assess the situation and decide on a course of action.

Stu was under attack at a very visceral level. Ever net a cat? Pussycat indeed!

People react to enslavement in different ways. This, my friends, is how Saddletramp1956's main characters respond. It is also how WE should consider responding to what is happening in our world today.

I needed my btb fix and you delivered...in spades. Please keep them coming as we need this righteous retribution. easily 5 stars although I would have preferred more background on how Nikki first fell under Ben's spell.

The Saddletramp treatment is the best! Thank you again.

Why do commenters continue to say welcome back. Were you missing?" I have to agree with others, not very interesting and lifeless.

A great read, thank's

Another over the top, fun read. Really glad to see you posting a story after a hiatus from the site. 4*

I guess the artistic license was extended to renaming characters mid-story. Really felt rushed and poorly edited. Like you had a schedule to meet to deliver a story.

You are one of the best on this story site, sorry to see this one tarnish your good name.

Surprise us, once in a while. This story is cliché after cliche.

Another SaddleTramp addition /conclusion to another author's story... and I don't think I've read one that wasn't good !

A "5" of course...

Meh, not really up to your standards, but you had little to work with. The original story sucked. 3/5

Other than Stu becoming Ben and Marie becoming Nikki this was a plot all too familiar

Not what I expected from one of my favourite authors

Oh well, still looking forward to your next story

That was really bad. Recycled plot from a number of Saddletramp stories. No character development to explain sudden insanity. Stu became Ben then Marie was Niki. Saddletramp don’t write while you’re drunk.

I think I would have sold the wedding dress on Craigslist. Also strange they didn’t install an alarm system when they put in the surveillance system; they should have anticipated a break in. But the perps did indeed get the ST treatment.

I can’t tell whether some of the anon comments are real (and really stupid) or are bad attempts at sarcasm.

"I also paid off and canceled our joint credit cards." - Well done. So many stories have them cancelled, but they really need to be paid off first. He COULD put a block on them, but she could just have it removed.

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Don't know why she cares about the wedding dress, she obviously didn't care about the marriage, I still think I would have given her the dress and album, but that's me. Also, a half hour isn't really long enough to clear out belongings. 24 hours would probably be a minimum, and if he was going through a formal eviction she'd probably get 30 days. I know, this isn't real life, just sayin'.

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Not a great security system if breaking the window didn't set off an alarm, nor did opening the doors without a code. Or was it just a surveillance system?

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This is such an improvement over the original that it's almost an insult to link the two.

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"Transposing names?" - I must have missed, gonna lose my nitpicking cred.

Story is OK, but at least much better than the original. thx

Well there should be a law against cheating, with a penalty of life in prison.

This is absurd overkill. Reads like a satire on the genre. Saddletramp at his worst.

Story although speaking from experience the wait should have been longer he jumped right back with both feet. Strange

Always a good day when we have a new Saddletramp story. Thanks for posting.

You screwed up the names a few times like the MC using the asshole's name as his when he called the PI and using the wife's name Niki when he was introduce to the new woman. Other than that, I enjoyed the 'Saddletramp treatment."

Great story. Welcome back to Literotica. Missed you.

You are slipping a bit ST

Mixing up characters is not like you

Always great. Thanks ST!

you need to keep your people's names straight one time he is stu next you call him Ben work it out

I liked the plot, but I would've liked to see it a little stretched out.

Yes, fantasy and all that, but the way you wrote it, the MC is not exactly the brightest bulb in the chandelier. I mean, seriously, how can you live with a woman for SIX YEARS, love her, trust her, sleep with her... and not notice anything? How can she suddenly and without any warning signs turn out to be a murderous bitch who enjoys seeing her partner of SIX YEARS being humiliated, tortured, and killed? And then not even showing ANY remorse afterwards?

Dad explained that Niki had just moved here from Montreal, and he "wondered" if I wouldn't mind showing her around, maybe taking her to dinner. I knew what he was up to, and I smiled to myself. Of course, I would be happy to escort Ms. Gagnon, I told him.

Above paragraph the first Niki should be replaced with Marie.

Otherwise I really liked the story.

Entertaining take on stupid people. Not your usual 5 star effort though. Just a few name interchanges that made it a bit confusing once or twice. Still like your universe. Keep them coming.

Always glad to see a new Saddletramp story!

Nice ST romp. Classic trope of moron wife actually being evil bitch. Classic trope of MC having friends in all the right places. Classic trope of having a pre-nap in place; owns house by himself; and meeting up with beautiful female who has gone thru similar experiences.

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One thing that didn’t get explained: how the bitch and Ben got into the house. Oh well.

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4 ****

Great story! You got a five from me.

BUT!

Why does some guy always have to have "the Big DicK"? And Jesus, you remembered anything from High School?" Let alone some French.

Thanks for the story.

carvohi (Jedd Clampett)

Been looking for your stories every time I am on this site. Great story and right up there with your normal writing. THANKS

I'm glad to have Saddletramp writing again. 5 stars as usual and pay no attention to critics who hide and write as Anonymous. I hope to see new chapters soon on whatever replaced MMAS and the good guys fighting against it

I don't know if you can fix this, but I thought I'd let you know about this small error. You mistakenly used Niki's name instead of Marie's once.

Dad explained that Niki had just moved here from Montreal, and he "wondered" if I wouldn't mind showing her around, maybe taking her to dinner.

It was another good read. Thank you

Yep - another great one from SaddleTramp.

(You did mix up the names a bit in a couple of places... Stu identified him self as Ben Johnstone when he called Eric. And Ms. Gagnon was referred to as Niki in at least one spot.)

Loved the story, though. A proper burning!

Yes, your sentencing was a bit over the top, but it’s a SaddleTramp story. It’s to be expected! They were lucky not to be staked out in the fire ants slathered in maple syrup. Thanks for writing!

Thank you so much. After a very bad day I needed this fun story. 5

Very good BTB! Glad SaddleTramp keeps writing!

5. Other then the names of the characters being switched at couple points pretty well written. Fixes a okay story that felt more like an outline then anything. Decent revenge on those that deserved it, wife is appropriately evil and happy ending for those that deserved it.

Your stories are like chicken soup.

Also every man could benefit from reading a few of these and seeing important trends. Even though it's fiction certain things carry over. The most important is obtaining proof and not jumping the gun until all your ducks are in a row. I can't tell you how many times I've listened to real life stories and the guy finds the proof on her cell phone and doesn't back it up and immediately confronts her. I have to stop myself from smashing my cell phone in a rage because I know exactly whats happening next. She deletes it and the dude is stuck with no proof and his torment goes on for months.

What's most infuriating is trying to help a guy in a cheating situation that think they know better. They act like getting a cheap 20 dollar hidden camera or voice activated recorder is ridiculous and they get angry with you for not taking them seriously. They then proceed to "try to talk to her". They refuse to consider it might be a long time thing and must have been a one night stand and that they would never sleep with them in his bed. Don't get me wrong, SOME women fess up. The worst don't. And a month later the guy is a mess and doesn't know which way is up anymore.

Believe it or not a cheating woman I heard in a video put it best when she was giving out some cheaters wisdom. She said the moment they cheat or as soon as you start divorcing, you're no longer friends. You're enemies. Don't act like they're the same person you married because they're not. You don't have to be needlessly mean just understand they're only looking after their own best interests. Many will lie and stab you in the back.

A good ST story, gets a 5 just for being that. About all that was missing was Justice O Peace, but then again I am greedy.

Good to see you back in the saddle and publishing

5 stars as usual. Great job as usual. Thanks for your stories.

You took a poor story and made it laughably bad. You should be ashamed.

The obvious question is, "Why did he marry her?" Did he not know her long enough to see even a glimmer of this amoral, narcissistic wife's personality? Humiliation and attempted murder? It was interesting, but a more three-dimensional character would be far more interesting. If the author added just a bit of inner conflict on her part, that would have made it more interesting. Sorry. I do appreciate the story. It's just a bit too much 2D.

I was really excited when you said you were going to give this story the "Saddletramp" treatment only to be slightly disappointed in not seeing Justice O Peace make an appearance. But it was still a good story nonetheless.

I have to laugh at the wife wanting to get nailed by a "big dick". Women may talk a big game when together about screwing a "big dick" but it is astounding how many women will balk at it after having one and not liking the discomfort because their bodies aren't built to take one. I have one and when some women found out how big I actually was, they either had tried one before and didn't like it, were afraid to try it, or tried it and it was too painful to keep going. This is no fun getting turned down like this and the first half dozen times it kind of hurts your feelings lol.

Keep up the good work. Have you thought about doing a spin-off with some new characters in the MMAS? That might be fun.

Nobody does burn like the Tramp. Well done as always.

I got a kick when anonymous wrote" " I can't understand the bad guys either, though. Why did they start the drowning but not see it through as they were present the whole time? They couldn't just give the drowned body to the police with rope burns, a lethal dose of restricted sedative, a lethal dose of cock cage, being pissed and cummed on, and claim it was a no-fault whoopsie goldberg. And that was the plan they put all of their brain juice together to invent!"

That is the crux of so many stories. The bad guys and even many of the good guys DON'T think. That is the basis of a story I am trying to flesh out. If I succeed halfway, I'll post if not, it goes into the trash bin. To give Saddletramp his creds here, he wrote an ending for a story that had a decent idea but no follow thru. And if the bad guys were not thinking with their dicks instead of their brains, the outcome would have been far different.

Wonderful story from the master himself! 10 stars!