All Comments on 'Love Doesn't Do It for Me'

Not for me. Too much wishy-washy feelings BS for me. I guess at least he had the balls to get rid of her so she couldn't continue to disrespect and use him as a fall back in case her new guy doesn't work out. Yeah, yeah she doesn't mention another man but you'd have to be blind not to know she's interested in someone else. You know "someone who is greater than us".

but not a complete story.

Her career won't keep her warm at night. Her career won't look after her when she is sick. Her career won't provide comfort when someone close to her dies.

Very different. The conversation was not as emotional as I would have thought. He didn't push for a yes or no and accepted the maybe. I guess that is all he needed. For me when she backed out on the family it would have been time for a deep and hard talk.

when its on your terms.

Extracting yourself from a poor investment can be more difficult than making a hopeful investment. Most people don't like to admit their decision did not turn out well. I have kept a worthless stock certificate for several hundred shares of a company that was quite successful, then went bankrupt. As the company struggled to survive I thought selling the stock was an act of disloyalty, bad faith, quitting. It was a good lesson that has rewarded me many times over.

Marriage should not be a gamble, but it is an investment. People change, circumstances change, financial, medical, emotional stresses can take their toll. This was an interesting display of a husband accessing the failure of his investment in a partnership. The two partners no longer wanted the same thing. It is obvious the wife was aware before the husband that the marriage would not last, but she was not going to reveal their ending until it was on Her terms. It appears she was actually concealing the end of her investment in the marriage until she had her exit strategy, and her knew partner, lined up and ready to depart. One wonders how long she has been trying out replacement partners.

The reference to a "feeling", a negative vibe, an instinct, is very refreshing. So many LW authors rely on the trope "I trusted her" as the excuse for looking away, staying clueless, not discerning the truth, avoiding confrontation. Oh My God, whatever you do you Must avoid confrontation! Weak minds always seem to retain enough strength to concoct an excuse. Read Richard Gerald.

I enjoyed his inquiry into his wife's diminishing commitment to the marriage, and his decision to end a dead end relationship on his terms. One wonders how many ignorant husbands are left holding a worthless marriage certificate as their ex wife rides off with her new partner. Sad.

Good job. Thanks for the effort, and the intelligence.

Honest logical dialogue between spouses?

“Maybe, but our blending of body and soul will always be when appropriate.”...

“Does the end of us depend on outside forces?”

Human beings don’t talk like that. Computer algorithms programmed to simulate human speech, perhaps, but not real live people.

Thank god her had a pair at the end. I was afraid he'd turn into a pussy there for a bit.

What rubbish.

A nothing story......

You should have finished the story.

Just a bunch of talking

Too strange for me.

I agree the start of the story started well, but I have never heard anybody speak like that. When you are talking to your spouse and ask them if they have found someone new and they say yes, you don't continue having a conversation with them with the same passion as when you read an instruction manual.

Just a waste of an interesting beginning.

Well, that was different.

It sounds like two machines talking, rather than people...

1/5

Interesting story. A 4 from me. no emotions just business. It sounds like the husband already knew she was a cheater and a slut, so no reason for him to cry...

WTF was that? It wasn't clever, to write a story, you need a beginning, middle and end! This has none of that, where are the minus scores?

actually i really enjoyed that one thank you for that. i can relate to an extent.

Certainly original — 4-stars

Insipid. First, too much narration, then when the dialog started, I missed the narration.

However, the dialog was somewhat stilted.

But it left me wanting to know what happens next.

So, please do let us know.

Liked the way it ended. Tell the bitch to eat shit and die

In an effort to write something different it ended up as...I have no clue how it ended up and I’m pretty sure the author doesn’t either.

It brings vividly to life the reactions of people to the play Waiting for Godot, many critics sub-titled it ‘Two characters waiting for a plot’. After watching the play audiences could be heard saying ‘what the fuck was that all about’.

I had the same reaction reading this.

Excellent.

The situation had potential, but the dialog felt too stiff. No emotion, no humour, no heft.

Feels a bit like an A.I routine's early attempt at a LW flash story.

So much left unsaid, but one must realise that perceived 'love' in a relationship is more than juat lust. Oh my...

She already has a replacement in the wings who she marries and has 3 kids. Her new hubby turns out to be a serial cheater who divorces her and then disappears leaving her destitute and miserable as she realises what she lost in her first husband. He is also remarried with a family and a wife who loves him.

So ... what do we have here, she has evolved into a narcacistic ladder climbing hoe who is gonna fuck her way to the top

Bitter sweet and to the point.

The story grew on me

Rereading it, so much was said in each word, then bam!:

The last sentence crystallized the relationship into past tense.

Love didn't do it for the guy. "Love" was clearly a very different thing for her. She was very clearly describing a cuckold relationship in her vision of "melding... when appropriate" to her.

I liked that he took control of his life and was ending things on his schedule vs. When she decided she didn't want him holding her back. It was an interesting perspective that dorbb describes the building of a career in EXACTLY the way many, most?, would describe building a family life. Hmmmmm.....

5*

You have some decent story ideas, and if you could inject a little human feeling into them you might have something.

At least he walked away

There's a story there. But this isn't it. The concept you have, it needs to be fleshed out, expanded. This is much more than 1500 words. You need to work on it, and you require an editor too.

Your predisposition for ending stories in the middle detracts from what might be great stories. This is similar to "She stopped talking" and equally annoying and frustrating. This one was not a surprise after the 'Stopped Talking' story just a reaffirmation that the talent and imagination is not there to 'do the job' 2**

Pack a bag and leave. She is delusional.

And you know someone who talks so idiotically puffy? You should change your circle of friends as soon as possible!

This one ended correctly. Absolute end answer to a fem style of mental cruelty, if allowed.

I thought you encapsulated the death of the relationship concisely and without extraneous fanfair. Apart that is for the wife's incomprehensible ramblings. She is obviously delusional and had already formulated an escape plan. Best thing for hubby is to legally ditch her sooner rather than later.

There is always another dick involved / I have even seen my daughters Marriage demise / and I saw the writing on the wall before her husband did/ It started out with a few E=mail to Dad while she was working / She was a veterinarian/ and she use to be required to attend / shows and parade just sitting with her dog ( twice she divulged some weird hyperbole's .) she did this twice both time I called it right . Scary too know someone so well . I am always amazed at how people divulge information about planned issues . Even when I was dealing with Unions I had that same calling when negotiating/ New how far I could push / when to walk out .

I told my first wife that being very vindictive, if she cheated on me,things would not end well for her. I told her that if was falli g out of love with me to at least act like a mature adult and ask for a divorce before she started spreading her legs.

Eight years married later,i caught her fucking one of my business partners, and using the prenup and family trust,she walked away with just her money and investments. I guess after the divorce,my ex thought that i wasn't going to do anything physical,and she started talking shit to some of our mutual friends. One Friday night she left a nightclub and was headed to her car in the parking lot when some stranger walked by her and doused her face in hydrochloric acid. The same night my ex business partner was also attacked,and in addition to his severe spinal damage, his face and junk were also damaged by acid. Of course i had a solid alibi for that night.

Three years later i met my second wife,and we just celebrated 34 years of wedded bliss.

Nice quick story...

Odd. I get it. I guess it makes sense. But very odd approach.

STUPID!!!

DUMB

Odd. Were you high when writing this?

Try again.

interesting conversation

U WOT M8

Nonsense

Fantastic. Never stay married to a cheater.

Goodbye Cunt Dont Get Married If You Cant Be Faithful.

A really civil way to say "fuck off you delusional bitch"... Very good especially for a short story.

All women (yes all) have that itch that can only be relieved by someone other than her husband.

way too short and not enough detail. this needs a lot more to make it good! 3*