All Comments on 'Love Lessons Ch. 01'

You need to get rid of the bi element and knock this little gal up, in your story.

come on, get rid of the bi elements and start REALLY knocking her up. The bi element is kind of odd and actually takes away from the frame story a little.

Really poorly written.. Your all over the place writing it, the dialog is disjointed and really confusing to read. Whats with the bi element? I thought the premise of the story was an 'extra credit assignment'? The title of the story should at least reflect on some aspect of the story.