All Comments on 'Luke Takes a Wife Ch. 05'

Listen, you have NOTHING to improve, please don't rework it, your story is great! The only thing that needs to change, is that it needs to be longer! Please add more and soon I can't wait to read it and the wait is killing me!

You should really switch to past tense. Apart from that, the story is well written

missing maturity in the story or new writer.

its amazing tell me there s gonna be at least one more they are never long enough for me

one of the best. keep up the good work!

This is a very good series, but this chapter seemed shorter than the others,,,,

Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the continuation.

But I can't give it 100% because of the tense you're telling the with if that makes sense to you. The story is wonderful but it's hard to read. I keep changing "Luke is' to Luke was". But I still really like it and can't wait for the next chapter.

I love your series just the way it is! (Except I too wish it was a little longer but that just keeps us eagerly waiting for more!) You're an excellent writer. Keep up the good work and please don't keep us waiting long for the next chapter.

Pick a tense! Past tense, present tense. (Okay, please don't choose present tense.) But pick one and stick with it. Sheesh! -- KK in Texas

I love this story also!! Keep in mind the previous suggestions about verb tense and it will get even better! Of course, for selfish reasons, I would also love to have longer chapters. Keep it up!

I agree with the 'tense' suggestion and that the chapters would quench our thirst more if only a bit longer. . . but I think there are a few comments bordering on rude and unhelpful. Ignore the rude!

wish you could finish this story... thanks... i love it...

I am loving this story just read from the start today and I can't wait to read more!!

I like the idea of the story but the writing needs a lot of improvement. You continually jump back and forth from present tense to past tense. Write it in past tense and it it will flow better. You also skip writing out scenes. Instead of describing them as they take place, it is mentioned that it already happened. For example:

"It takes longer than Luke thought it would to get rid of Ben. It's as Ben is leaving that he mentions that his little sister's run off...probably gotten herself pregnant or something. Selfish little thing, leaving their dad to fend for himself and take care of the farm while him and Lee are on the circuit.."

This scene would have been much better had you wrote it as it was happening with character dialogue. Creatively you have the ideas but you need to improve technically on your writing.