All Comments on 'Lunch Hour'

I love to see a new writer in the fold. Especially one with such perfect word crafting skills. But as to the story? What story. The only characterizations tell he is male and he is female and they appear to work in the same building. The plot begins with his sticking his tongue in her mouth and ends with him with his tongue in her mouth. Well-written descriptions of what these two did in the car, but what do we care? WHO are they, do they have kids or spouses at home to go back to. Will she get a raise for this? Will she get pregnant? Please take your skillful descriptions of sexual coupling and insert them in the middle of a story line, so we can give a crap.

Next time, finish the story, then post it.

Fantastic first time entry!

The way you wrote it, it could be any man and any woman. So easy for the reader to put themselves into the story.

Well done! Welcome to Literotica!

-E