All Comments on 'Lust for Old Woman, the Dish Washer Pt. 02'

I like your style. A little editing might smooth over a bit of confusion.. i was unsure for a moment if it were one woman or two.but maybe it was only my misinterpretation.

You're right. There were two women in the story. The scavenger and the kitchen worker.

Wow. Nice. Feels very real. I love how horny the old dishwasher gets. Please write more. I’d love to see the old lady get more and more excited till she looks forward to seeing him. And doesn’t need to be paid anymore. I agree with the comment about editing though. You gave great natural talent and a good editor would only make this work better.