by GiddyDreamer
I want going to comment, but I went straight from this story to an older one, something about a too thin twin sister.
This story and that story are basically identical, the same attitudes from the characters, even some of the same lines.
I didn't even get to the one you referenced in the prologue here.
Do you just repeat the same story over and over, changing the names and locations? That doesn't make for good reading, even if the writing had been good (which it wasn't).
I had to change my rating when I found out this is at least your third telling of the same story.
Ridiculous dialogue, unreal and as someone has already pointed out, far too much waffle.
A natural act of love and tenderness.
Hope you add more chapters.
I enjoy the storyline, the ending felt a little rushed and unreal; I am referencing about living together as a couple that is. But other than that, it’s a fun story.
Man you sure rushed the ending... Lol. Still good story, but it was a little repetitive on the talking and I can't really see two people talking like the are bearing the entirety of their souls each time. Still 4 stars
Loved it because my extremely hot sister is named Jenna and although we haven't made love yet, we have pleasured each other with our fingers and our mouths. We are not going to talk about actual sex we've agreed, but we will just let it happen naturally, and it will. Maybe I'll write a story about it here.
Good premise.
But eroticism is really lacking. Each sexual encounter seems to be described as if the author just wanted to get it over with.
Two stars.