All Comments on 'Madeline's Search for Relief'

Wow, keep going please. Love where this might go as if Ash is the only one who can make her cum she wants him forever

Very sexy and solid writing. The tense of the POV changed from past tense to present tense in the final several paragraphs, so just be mindful of consistency when proofreading. Solid start!

Finally! An author that knows the difference between “cum” and “come”!

Avery good first story, keep writing!

First things first, WouderlustKing. You are not dumb, so take that out of your profile right now. I've read many stories on here that were written by some very intelligent people that read like they were written by someone of about third grade level. For your first go, you did a great job. If there was any mistakes I didn't notice them. It flowed good and was easy to read. I can't wait to read more of this one and see how things turn out for them. I look forward to reading other stories from you as well. Keep it up and stop thinking your dumb cause you certainly are not

Wow, in four years, you could have figured out that present tense is a horrible choice for a story. Maybe wait even longer before you try this again.

That is a good a story like we expect from the UK-trained writers. You usually do much better than Americans. The change in tense toward the last seemed unusual, though. Overall, I enjoyed it and look forward to more good entertainment from you. You are a good writer and better than many here. Thanks.

Must have been a hand contortionist.

Outstanding first story. Would love to read a sequel. Keep it up.

When she slided her hand up her body, I became arouseded bigly.

Not bad...Quatro estrellas!

Great first story. But you left your readers hanging, so get on to the second chapter. Five stars.

Great story, Hopefully part two doesn't sit in the drafts for four years lmao

Wonderfully written story, please finish. Like Madddie, I haven't cum yet!