All Comments on 'Madison Ch. 01'

That was a great start to a series that you wrote. I saw the third chapter was rated Hot so I thought I would read the first chapter to get the complete understanding of the series. I like the way you wrote this first chapter explaining things from the past on how things had gotten to this point with Madison.

this should have been in the group area it would have got better ratings there

Ok so i'm not the worlds best author or anything, but your dialoge is shotty at best. Your Frame Tales need to be seperated and not just jumbled into to eachother. I barely got through introduction of the characters before I was whisked off to another set of characters and to be honest I really don't know who is who.

You seem to have a knack for details so maybe you should concentrate on those. You need to give some explanation to things before you just jump off the deep end into another part of the story.

Keep it up though. You apparently have a passion for writing and far-be-it from me to quell creativity.

All the best,

Jeff

Jeff,

Try posting criticism with a spell check. I can tell you that any author will ignore any critique of anyone’s work with words spelled incorrectly. The word is shoddy.

C.