All Comments on 'Mageslayer Ch. 02'

Mepher's usual finely-tuned descriptions take the reader on a journey into the story, exactly where one wants to be. Well worth the time to read...

Toofy really, really wants to try Lori's split tongue inside herself. Also... Does the Elz have any interest in binding up with vines? Saia needs a playmate.

Superb writing and world-building. Loved the detail of the split tongue caused by the difficulty in speaking an immortal language. I've never seen that before and I loved it. The magic circle description was VERY well done. I really liked the way you sketched it out in such evocative detail. I also liked the way you tied it into the movement of the sun, moon, and stars. I'm very impressed with this tale so far.