All Comments on 'Magic Man - Hotel Encounter'

Three IS the magic number; just ask any Genie!

A few things jumped out . . .

You have a habit of presenting more than one character's thoughts or speach in one paragraph.

Dangling participles AND excessive words are throughout your piece.

Ten years of crossdressers and still uncomfortable in modest heels? Seems incongruous to what one would expect.

Can't wait for you to take us further with this story. Great start.

Very creative and well written .. I think that he could have a new full time job if he wanted it .. and had the strength .. one lady a week who would become the woman of her dreams .. he would be very popular :)

if only

Great start. Well written

Please continue writing

Loved this storyline!! Please write at least one more chapter.