All Comments on 'Magister Ch. 03'

Great story so far, all 3 chapters. Keep them coming!

Lot's of promise here. The story is gripping and erotic. I'm surprised no one has chewed you out for the BDSM like they do me(lol). Guess you're just lucky like that ;)

I would like to point out that I noticed you tend to shift POV from one character to the other, like somewhere from when he woke her to the point where he tells her to remove her clothing, there's a shift in perspective view points. He tweaks her nipple and she is amazed at the pleasure she feels. But the story started out in his view point. Just wanted to point that out in case it wasn't your intention to put it that way. If it was, well then my bad :)

Also, just a pet peeve of mine: in the sentence 'After they had eaten lunch, he again took...' Wouldn't it sound better if you dropped the word 'again'? It just sounds very wordy with the 'again' wedged in there. Just a friendly suggestion.

The scene of the 'punishment' was hot (being a little pain lover myself-oh yeah ;))

Keep up the good work, it keeps my creative juices (lol) flowing when I start feeling burned out from writing. Thanks for posting. :D

Please keep writing!

Thanks for the feedback. Considering how much I <3 you're stories, it is appreciated.

There will be a short delay for chapter 4, due to RL work issues. 12 hours of overtime, while kind on the bank accound, is not so kind to my muse,

Love this story, can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you,

I am enjoying how well written it is. I hope you do not give up on the story like so many. :)

Chapter 4 will be slightly delayed, due to a massive amount of overtime this week, but it's in process.

Thanks for all the comments.

I'd be nice if Alasara fell in love with Damian before he fights with the evil person (antagonist).

Can we have some more of this story soon? I love it

I will be coming back to this folks. Sorry for the delyas, but personal circumstances intervened. Currently working on CH 4.

Wow, I really like this! I pictured her as a blonde though. . .

Can't wait for more!

I really enjoyed this story. It's well written and intriguing. Please continue with the upcoming chapters. We all understand busy, so this is just encouragement, not bitching.

Thanks for a great story

A most excellent chapter. This is looking to develop into a really good series. It's a shame that it's stalled.

I've lost access to this account. Anyone looking to see an updated version of this can find me over at Storiesonline under the same name. I've started posting new chapters there. Lit was unable to help me recover my account.