All Comments on 'Making a Marriage Work'

What is a Nine Horse Hitch, anyway? I have seen eight, and ten, but never nine.

Gregg, Will, John. How many stories did you poach from to create this mess of an attempted story? At least prof your story before letting it loose.

Total trash,

Not even three paragraphs in and I am confused and not caring about the characters.

So many desire this relationship

Spell check please. Is his name Greg, John or Will? Otherwise good start

Poor writing. Needs editor. Words left out. Didn't finish. I wrote some stories once and they were rejected at first because of punctuation... How does rubbish like this get through?

if you plan on a second chapter please have some one proof read it first for misspelled words

I'm sorry about the errors. I'm very embarrassed by my errors. If there was an edit button, I would fix my errors (if there is an edit button I can't find it). I'll proof read my work twice next time. I want to thank everyone who read the story. I hope you loved it as much as I did writing it. If you didn't or the error ruined your enjoyment I'm sorry. I'll try my best to do better and not except anything less than my best. Thank you all.

I do plan on making a second chapter even before all this really get all this attention. Thank you all again, even if you're hard on my work. I'm reading the comments and taking in all responses positive and negative to improve. Have an great day.

I’m guessing English is not your first language

Stopped reading before finishing the first page. The worst writing effort ever to get posted on LIt.!

Try a different hobby and do all of us a favor!

Anyone who tries to write for public consumption deserves credit - not easy. That said, this story is extremely difficult to read. A large number of the errors would have been picked up by correct use of Word or Google Docs, then Grammarly would have got you 80%. An editor would get you to 95%. I found the storyline weird, and not credible, but perhaps that’s just me. Try again, and if you can get an editor who can give you style advice and not just proof read, you may get there. Good luck.

I liked the idea behind this story, but others have pointed out its multiple flaws, so I won't repeat them.

You mention not being able to edit your story, but other authors on Lit have taken down and reposted stories with corrections and rewrites. You may want to look into doing that for this one.