All Comments on 'Making My Mark'

I'ma call that a 4 star cus it did have some character building and actual story to it, tho I prefer more story than sex, it was still great, ty for taking the time to write this story

A very different but arousing story. A very interesting link to reconnect through the witch to his Dad and Mom and now sister !! Hopefully, Mark will be able to screw his sister a lot and she will use him more and more. His Mom will use him too. Then comes the witch, who will keep him recharged and give him all the help he needs to help these same women ! Hopefully, more chapters to cum !! Thank you.

But the combinations were great. Mom and friend. Sister's friend's sister. And sister and friend.

Awesome.

Could be more than enough for a sequel.

It would take a Halloween spell for even a young stud to cum that many times. But I loved it...would make for a good follow-up story...what happens with mom, sister, and of course Kim and Maggie. 5 Stars.

I had to stop reading the story to inform you on the proper spelling of WICCA. I am a wiccan and it is a sore subject. Now I will read the story. Thank you,

Adam

Interesting, JD wants more character building.

I want more sex. Just enough character building to know who’s who.

I’m here for the sex & the magic of dad & all the sex. Loved it. Detailed sex is more fun. Love to see Mark back with the moms too next week.

I love fucking moms. Especially 2 at once.

Thanks.

Bob

What the hell is a wicked clan? Do some homework and learn about the things you write about before putting pen to paper.

Sex slave stories are so over used, same thing every time. I don’t think they are very realistic. 2 stars

I loved the story please keep it going

I was meant to press 5* so dont think i didnt like it!

I do wish he had made love to his sweet sister.

Even thought this was a Halloween story, I hope you have another chapter with

Kym, Karen, Julie, Jenny, and his Mother.

And of course the Queen of the show, MAGGIE.

Maybe she might become his real Queen.

Can't wait until you have another chapter.

loved it. I would like to see him and sis get together and her decide to stay with him and Mom. Maybe an occasional romp with kim unless you have another direction in mind.

I'm only 5 minutes in and it's AISLE, WICCAN, PENILE, etc. Please, use an editor.

I liked the theme, but I found the language was degrading towards the woman.

I appreciate the effort and will read your other stories

Great, hope you continue this.

Part 2 please.

Good story with a good plot. However, 0 build up, 0 foreplay and 0 editing nearly ruined it.

Was kinda hoping to see the witch get fucked

I enjoyed all aspects. I really hope you continue the story.

Great story. You have to continue this story. I want to hear how Maggie enjoyed her magic. And I want to hear if he continues with his sister and Mother.

I was just chuckling at the fact that he was wearing a batman mask. Just imagining batman screwing them lmao. Good story though loved it.

This story was crazy af. You've created a sex addict who is actually nice!!!

When I saw the spellings of "penal" for 'penile', "isle" for 'aisle', and "wicken" for 'wiccan', all in the first half page, I quit reading. If a story is that poorly written/edited, it just becomes too painful to read, so I gave up. Not worth the effort.

At the beginning, the "sister's" name is Jamie. Later on, it's Katie. The spelling and grammar is atrocious. Learn to proofread your writings before submitting a story. Unbelievably annoying.

Love the story line and would like to see it continue.

This story was great, it was fun. I would like to read the continuation of this story.

I loved it.

The story line was great and I would love for u to share and make a second part of as

As many parts as you need to end this with a great carding loving ending

You do have a gift thanks for sharing it

With all of us . Thank you good luck on all you wright

Never give give up . Thank you and god bless

Dc.cowboy

I loved the premise of the wishes and of being with his mom and sister. Not so sure about the cumming in the hair thing, though. However, given your pen name, it's apparent that you like it and that's all that matters. I did find it a little strange that the dad would tell his son that his mom loved it when he came on her hair. My dad and I talked about a lot of stuff but how he fucked my mom wasn't one of them! lol

I thought this was quite a good story, well written and hot. And I have to admit, I would very much like to see what he does with the last task. My thought is that he uses it to settle down into a happy family unit with his mum, sister, and maybe either the witch Margaret or the possible girlfriend Julie, or perhaps all in a dynamic and otherwise stable fruitful (heh) group of relationships.

But those are my thoughts and fantasies, and may not be yours. I'd be interested in reading the sequel if you posted one.

Thank you for this story.

Love to see more chapters of this. So many ways to continue this story!!!! Great job....

Loved the story. I am hoping you add a second and or a third chapter. Does he get to do his mother again? How about his sister. Does it work out with Kim. What happens with Maggie. So many thoughts to answer. Just saying.

If he screws his mom, but she doesn’t know it’s him? It doesn’t count.

do you little children find it essential to write dialogue for some kid to have used that is so degrading to a woman? It DOES'T make the character appear larger, but it DOES make the typist look SMALLER and more IMMATURE, regardless of age or sex.

This was awesome keep up the good work and add more to this.

A little jumpy but other than that very well written I think you should add a couple more chapters to this if I were you I would dedicate one to the mother one to the sister and then one to the potential girlfriend and maybe in that one get all three of them together.

I loved the something different with Maggie! Great job, thanks for writing!

Grandma would have slapped the shit out of me if I even thought of degrading women. Mom would have gave me a very disappointed look. Why read. See how far in degradation our society has fallen. But by comments all haven't.

Fun All Hallows Eve tale!

One correction it's 'Wiccan' NOT 'Wicken' (no Wicker Men - or baskets involved here).

(11/6/2022) Oh, this was different. Fun, spooky, and really HOT. Gotta hand it to those Wiccans (correct spelling "Wicca"). Five stars.

Wow, that was ridiculous, unbelievable and just a waste of your time. Do you know anything about getting laid...

Screw it story sucks, hate the twist of making the parent a part of the sex scene. Just plain gross. These stroy tags need to be on page 1 not the last page. 1 star everytime a parent is involved. No exceptions.

Sheesh. So whats with all this cumming in the hair stuff? Now that's a fetish I've never heard of. Oh, well. Also, how is it that so many authors of this genre have a penchant for giving the ladies red hair. (check it out). . . .