All Comments on 'Making Use of the Fairchilds'

Hey! Here's an idea! How about a sequel where one of them bites his dick off and he bleeds to death?

I thought it was actually quite good and can't wait for the next part

Pathetic. are you old enough to be on this site ? A load of absolute garbage. Worst story I have ever read on here, by a mile.

Instead of attacking the author and the writing, why not offer constructive criticism that might help with future stories?

I didn't mind the story, but found the suspension of disbelief hard to maintain because there's no development of the characters. Why was the guy living in his car? Why did the mom submit to incest so quickly? Psychological trauma resulting from an attack can lead to odd behavior, but what motivated the teacher to attack them in the first place?

I love your story. There is a lot of things you can do better but I found it exciting anyway. Sure the characters could use a little background so that we understand why they did what they did and I advise you to do it for your next story. Here it's too late.

You could also slow down a little. James just came in and it's already an orgy. It would have been better if he used Rebecca without the girls knowledge and then moved on them. Perhaps seducing Nate and slowly bringing her to become a slut.

Here everythings happen so fast. If he were a stranger who attacked them it could have worked but they know him. Why he abuses them suddenly?

It's not the best story ever but it's exciting and that's all matters in the end. If you don't like story with men abusing women just don't read them. Sure in real life you would want to torture and kill a man like that but it's just a fantasy.

Keep writing.

Thanks for the feedback all!

To answer your question Ferrumitzal, he was sleeping in his car because his house burned down, which was also his motivation to attack them (he had a bad week and was taking it out on a colleague he had lusted after). It's about as flimsy a justification as exists, but then this is the Magical Land of Nonconsensual Porn after all, where all women immediately become sluts after being raped and every man is built with three legs. Or maybe that's just in bad noncon porn..?

When I wrote the draft for this it was much longer and had more of a build up over several days, but... then I got bored and cut it down. It would've probably been more believable if it had been longer. I'll have to be more patient with future stories.

As for the negative comments... What is it about my violent and misogynistic smut that some people don't like? It's a mystery for the ages! But no seriously I'll put a disclaimer at the top in future.

I don't usually read N/C stories, but when I do, I'm glad to find one as hot as this!

Ha of all the crimes a man can commit, leaving his socks on during sex is the worst. Bad Asphalt!

Also for the record people, it is very possible to be a raging feminist and still fantastise about rape and sexual dominance.

Let's get that clear.

That lady needs to learn how to use a telephone. She really has no excuse - most rapists aren't even polite enough to warn their victims in advance.

Congratulations, you have officially written the hottest goddamn story on the goddamn internet. Goddamn.

Please, never stop writing these.

Loved it can't wait for part 2.

His explanation of how the girls will stop going to school seems a bit of a throwaway paragraph, that should be fleshed out or eliminated (it's not really necessary for the plot of the story and doesn't make much sense as is).

I disagree about the school comment. It works because it's a dominance thing. The point is that they'll stay home and their entire lives will revolve around serving him sexually. It's not there for plot, it's there to be a fucking hot fantasy.

Anyway, looking forward to part 2, and I hope to see a lot more of these sorts of stories from you in the future.

This was hot but i feel so sad everytime i think about alice having to watch snowberry getting torn apart then used as a cum rag

Maaaaan when are you gonna finish this? America wants to know.

While the premise of the story is common enough that I can buy into this being a relatively popular fantasy, there are ways to make the fantasy outstanding as opposed to ridiculous. This story failed to be outstanding due to one poorly executed facet, the dialogue. The interplay between the adults is boring and predictable and in what world are the two young women 18? They behave and speak like preteens at best. If the subject matter doesn't offend a reader, then the fact the author apparently thinks his readers are simpletons should.

Fantastic domination story!

Please finish it...not fair to keep us hanging.

One of the daughters goes to the police and he goes to prison for 25 years minimum. The mother loses all custody of her daughters and of course her job! So you were going to tell us the quickest way to get to jail, or what?