All Comments on 'Man of the House'

A very average story, sorry. AAA++

Damn good story. A little advice. Edit & proof read before you post. It will make for an easier read. That said, slow down & expand on the characters & the plot. Add more dialogue for the interactions between the family to make the story longer & not as rushed feeling & sounding. Who says mom can't have a couple more fruitful "one night stands" anyway. She's only human & lonely. What would be wrong with sis finding out & bringing her to the breeding bed? You are the man of the house after all! You need to keep this one going. I do like it. Only could go 4☆ due to what I mentioned here.

I loved this 💕

So natural that when a son takes over as "man of the house" with daily activities mom slowly blends it to everything. Beautiful how she laid on the bed.

3 story. But a 2 star story because it really needs editing. The story was short enough to catch the obvious ones.

Should have given her more babies ....

In the first paragraph he’s 19. By the 6th paragraph he’s almost 22? Small things ruin a story.

I would like to see Kathy catch them fucking then join in with them. Then they would pair off at different times. Kathy and her brother, mom and son and mother and daughter.

Have someone proof read it first, please!

And the sister is too dumb to figure out her family is fucking

I agree with Anonymous about more character development. What about her son made her desire him? For example:

- Did she see him as a clone of her late husband?

- Was she tired of trying to suppress an active sex drive?

Overall, a good story.

Great plot, but needed better editing and not done in a rush. Fill out the story with details. I agree with others that she can have more than one baby. A 2nd chapter telling us about her new baby bump and the months of swelling growth - with an edited and much more full story, would be great. CHapter 3 can have him claim his sister; being the man of the house.

Joanne and then mom and then joanne. Kathy and then Kelly and then Kathy again. what a fvcking mess

You start off I'm nineteen,and live with my mother, then a couple of paragraphs later while talking to your mother you say "I am almost twenty two and still a virgin.how old are you? You really need to get some editing done.

No affection, or any emotions at all...

Good story. I hope for a chapter 2 where his sister catch him and his mom and he breeds his sister as well

I was expecting his sister catching them and joining in for the experience. Maybe the next chapter will incorporate them into a family threesome !

I gave it a 4.

Very predictable scenario. Father dies. Son takes over the farm. Son takes over the woman of the house because he is now the man of the house, and he receives all the benefits of being man of the house.

It's even predictable that mom will end up getting pregnant with her son's baby.

If a man truly loves a woman no matter who she might be....mother, sister, neighbor, aunt, cousin.

wanting to fuck his baby in her is something he wouldn't ever give much thought to. In the back of his head, he is thinking of that small possibility that maybe, just maybe he will get her mother pregnant.

I got my sister pregnant and when she told me that her period was late, I was elated. She knew in her heart that I was so happy knowing that she was pregnant with my baby. We have been together for 10 years and we have 3 beautiful babies together.

If I were the son in this story I would want to continue to fuck my babies in my mother.

Really loved this story but you should have continued till he had his sister 5 stars

Worth 5*, barely. Decent story idea, but a few issues, most notably sister’s name. Felt a little rushed, but not bad. Keep writing, and get feedback before publishing, if you can.

Tc

What a lucky young man. he should be banging his sister too and make more babies. More please.

Short. Sweet. Simple. Predictable. A bit with the run-on sentences. Break the thoughts up a bit sometimes.

Only 2 stars to short in my opinion. Longer and in more detail.

more content for the background. That doesn't mean that your work is bad, but I don't think it's worth more than that.

Please write a sequel and show us that you can do better.

It is still a good story, keep up the hard work. You have an very good active imagination

4⭐️