All Comments on 'Man Plans, God Laughs'

Repetitive. Only difference is the format.

If you won't punish this Rafe person, don't include his POV. It'll just irritate readers.

What about the asshole? He got a free pass?

That's why I don't like reading your stories. Fucking retard

Average story. AA+

Strangely okay story. I'm not sure whether it was the flow, the lack of emotions or my own stupidity, but the story never really picked up off the ground. One thing I found impossible to believe was that his wife gave him sloppy seconds. I would think ANY man could take one look at a woman he had known for that many years, look at her vagina and know for a certainty that she had had sex that day. Just seems like a given. Keep after it.

Good she got hers in spades. Deserved so too, the stupid woman. Great story.

Scores 5/5

Meh.

Typical Hooked1957

Decent writing

Married 20+ years

Wife called Tracy- Thinks it's OK to cheat

Formulaic writing

A very interesting take and I found that having it told from all sides gives the story so much more depth. I found Traci to never really feel how much she betrayed Mike and she ended up all alone as a final punishment. Well told

Traci was such an unmitigated cow that I simply couldn't get into this at all. Jesus christ.

Well done. Realistic and I could root for someone without feeling foolish. I was somewhat perplexed that Mike didn't get back into the dating game sooner than 5 years, but Traci's problems didn't surprise me. Second time around women usually end up with men significantly older than they. This story was the right length and the technical aspects weren't bad. As usual, this author hasn't mastered the me/I pronoun dilemma, but that's par for the course. 4*

Very entertaining read and good job, as always, Mr. Hooked. 5*

I loved it! I have to say, though, that my heart was in my mouth when Mike started going out for coffee then lunch with Traci after they'd split. I really feared that his resolve was weakening and he was going to take the skanky pin cushion back! Thankfully, he stayed smart and kept her at a distance. Smart man, 5 stars.

Not one of your better efforts to say the least. Rafe skates and lives happy ever after with zero consequences for destroying Mike's marriage. Also very little fall out for Traci. The story seems like a little feel good paint by numbers tale to me. Sadly you've ready gone soft on cheaters in your stories lately.

It was okay, but the constantly shifting character perspectives didn't help, and just repeated the same information. Traci being in lust with a younger man could've just as easily been covered in Mike's perspective. As a consequence of the wasted wordage, you skipped over all the later interactions with Rose, so she was basically just a cardboard cutout character.

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Mike becoming a recluse for five years really sucked.

Also, Rafe destroyed their marriage with no consequences. He even got a happy ending with a younger woman!

What has happened to the old Hooked we loved??? I've really been disappointed in your stories lately. "The Barkley Chronicles" were a total flop and now this. A weak cheating wife story where the wife and lover gets off with no consequences for their actions and Mike spends 5 year wallowing in self pity. It's starting to look like the next story will have Traci cheating and Mike willingly being her happy little cuckold waiting up for creampies when she comes home from being with her lovers. God, I hope not. I'm hoping the original Hooked1957 we loved will reassert himself and start wielding the sword of justice again. I guess time will tell.

That is one delusional character you conjured up.

Great story!

Jesus reading this pissed me off. You spent too much time trying to de-construct the cheating spouse mindset. I really would have preferred to read more of Mike life after and his new relationship.

nice little story with a few ridiculous bits.

5 years without an appointment.

5 years of jerking off? you didn't specify if he still had a sexuality or if he had become a real Saint or a real Angel.

And miraculously.

He resorts and finds the right woman on the first attempt.

What luck ! Better than winning the lottery.

the wonderful world of Disney World.

WTF? Rafe fucks his wife. Blows up his marriage and Mike does nothing to him. Very much unlike Hooked1957 cheated upon husbands and not in a good way.

5*

Yes it was worth it because that was your original decision when the opportunity to cheat was on offer. It was also worth it when you wanted both husband and lover when in counseling.

I know this story was trying for realistic , but I really hoped something terrible would happen to “rafe” as well. Whether it was a physical thing, or the ex wife having an enlightening chat with rafe’s wife, or, something/anything

Isn't that what they call doubling down? If one mistake is bad, repeating it can only solve the problem? Foolish woman. I know there are people like this in the world and I only hope their number is few. Good story well told.

Paint-by-numbers LW tale. Wife cheats, lives to regret it, husband finds someone else. Ho-hum.

I had high hopes but there was just nothing new and to make it worse, nothing exciting.

What sane 45 yro man would want a divorced slut who was caught cheating on her husband? and when confronted, she had the gall to tell him she won't give up the "best sex of her life". And she's wondering why men in their 40's weren't looking for a relationship with her?😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭..why is it in these type of stories the wife deludes them selves to think, that the husband loves her so much that he's willing to flush his self respect, his morals, his beliefs, his manhood down the toilet just to keep them? What makes these cum sluts pussy so special? There's other pussies in the sea. Stop deluding yourself into believing you can't/won't be replaced🤭🤭. This whore didn't love her husband, but she surely expected him to love her more than he love himself. She didn't even give a fuck when they divorced. She only wanted him back after finding out men in her age group aren't interested in a relation with long in the tooth old sluts. Most are either married, single not looking to get married or they just like fucking dumb sluts. Either way, they're not interested..now she's going to die in a old folks home by her damn self with her fond memories of the "greatest sex of her life"🤭🤭🤭.. she better pray she remembers the greatest sex of her life and that dementia don't take those memories🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣.. had he stayed with the slut she would've been back to replacing the greatest sex of her life. Her husband couldn't and shouldn't compete with her lover/potential lovers. The competition was over when they married. No married person should be in competition for their spouse. how do you compete with the "greatest sex of her life"? ... you can't /shouldn't. can anyone see this whore being satisfied with him after the "greatest sex of her life"? Hell fuck NO!. I see her searching for a new lover.. she's just a typical slut who wanted her cake and eat too. She didn't love her husband. She loved herself. She loved the tingling betweeen her legs, she loved that her husband loved her. She's a narcissist.. I dont see how this didn't come out in the 25yrs they been together? This is not behavior that just popped up. She had to have shown her narcissism in all those years. Her mindset was, you love me too much to let me go. You'll let me do this. Who been with someone for 25yrs and don't know what they will and won't put up with? 25yr relationship and the wife actually believed that he was such a wimp with no backbone, spine or self respect hed allow her to continue to fuck around.. this is not new behavior. It's juts been hidden or he wasn't paying attention in those 25yrs.

Hindsight is always 20/20

Very realistic and captures the reader. Wished there was more burning but it doesn't always happen. Thanks SK742

Well done, my friend.

"I am fully aware that saying I love my husband more than anything sounds self-serving, but it's completely true." - That's so completely a lie. You don't cheat on a husband who you love "more than anything," with a lover that you "can't give up." She "can't give him up" even though she knows she'll eventually have to, so why not save herself some grief and do it now.

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"It was like he had shot an electrical thunderbolt right to my pussy." - In other words, the Martian Slut Ray.

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"he apparently caught Rafe and I in our bed one time, and had video" - Nothing was said at the time about him recording them.

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"I would start out trying to get Mike to agree to me keeping Rafe as a lover on the side" - She can't seriously think that will fly.

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"I have to have him." - She HAS to have him, but she'll supposedly give him up?

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"He didn't love me enough to let me have Rafe." - OMFG! SHE didn't love Mike enough to not even start with Rafe.

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"if she could do what she did to the man she said she loved above all else, what could I expect?" - Yep, she'll cheat with you, she'll cheat on you.

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"why wouldn't he date me if he was going to be dating other divorced women." - Because the other divorced women didn't cheat on him.

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"I thought he loved me so much that at the very least, he would forgive me my transgression." - MAYBE he would have, if it wasn't so obvious that she was always going to be hot for Rafe.

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"Makes me want to puke. It should be me." - It WOULD have been her i she didn't fuck things up.

Grass might look greener over there, but it's not!

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Well-written and entertaining story!!! A nice, easy and fun read. Keep it up!! 5+++/5!!

I'm thinking that Rafe should be relieved of his testicles.

Rafe was a lit professor at a Christian college and Mike never thought to out him to the administrators? Big gaff in the story. He didn't want to go to jail beating on the guy but stepped aside for him to continue fucking his ex as long as he wanted.

Also going all the way to old age kind of wore out the story. still gave you 4 stars

On always get hooked on one of hooked1957 stories. Thanks for a great read.

As usual, pretty solid LW story. The depth of emotions and details of the characters shallows out a bit post-divorce. 4* as a result.

Liked the syphilis angle. Would have liked to hear about the wrath of infected partners and their infected spouses ruining her life.

Just learn to write in 3rd person. Changing POV's, with or without the equally distracted bold face names above each section is just annoying and pointless.

5 stars and one of your better stories.

Being a Septuagenarian, I could relate my life to the characters you depicted in this story. It is not very surprising that retired people are constantly showing up on some statistic or other, as being especially prone to getting Sexually Transmitted Diseases (STD). Maybe it is because we think we have lasted this long, what else can kill us?

Fun little tale. Would have been fun if Rafe's new partner knew about his lack of respect for vows.

Let's get the formalities out of the way first. It's Hooked1957. And as usual with him, it's a 5. Now, on to the show. This is an unusual H57 effort in that it very explicitly recalls an earlier story, "The Thunderbolt." Not only is a "thunderbolt" referred to here, but the MMC's last name is the same one as the woman the MMC in the predecessor tale winds up with (after the Traci in that story, like in this one, is hit by said thunderbolt, wanders off the reservation into the ether, and, quite deservedly, winds up ruining her life). As far as I'm concerned, the similarities, the parallels, are all to the good. Hey, I loved "The Thunderbolt," so why wouldn't I love this one? Another thing to love in this story was the multiple first person narratives, a device I always enjoy. I know some readers find them confusing. I don't, especially when they're so neatly identified as is the case here. Having praised this story, I should balance that out by pointing out a couple of small glitches. One is that on page 2, Traci refers to "going home to an empty apartment" but on page 3 she moves into a senior community because "my old house was way too big for me" - which was it? Did they sell the marital home in the divorce (most likely), or did she get to keep it in exchange for him getting the cash and investments (also possible) ? Continuity error here that a little eyeball-proofing might have caught and corrected. The other glitch I noticed is also in Traci's final narrative on page 3, where she states "I was a little more suspect in my choice of partners" - don't think the word "suspect" is what she (via Hooked) meant to say. Maybe the word should have been "circumspect" ? Again, proofing might well have caught that. But don't get me wrong, these are small quibbles. Bottom line here is that this is one fine story, and particularly lovable is the fact that at the end of the story, Mike and Rose have been married for 25 happy years - nicely writing over Mike's 23 years with Traci and Rose's 15 years with HER cheater.

QM

Really enjoyed the tale. I would have loved to see Rafe get his though. Still 5*’s. Thanks

I like your stories, but frankly they get old really quickly, and I fail to see any progression from you as a writer or in the overall development of your topic.

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Adding Traci’s perspective seems gratuitous, like some silly commenters accused you of using the MSR so you feel like you have to explain how the Thunderbolt is more credible than the Martian Slut Ray. If Traci’s perspective doesn’t improve the story’s development, it’s nothing but a distraction from the priority theme, Mike’s plans that God re-wrote.

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I hope Mike got to take his trip with Irish Rose.

A good day today in LW.

Writers I like posted today:

Hooked1957

Skippy47

saddletramp1956

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I keep thinking Mike was kinda wimpy beta guy.

He could have given the same medicine to Rafe now that he is married.

Mike would have tried to try Rafe's wife, if not him then hire a pro seducer...at least.

The most he could do was hire someone to beat Rafe, in front of his wife, and tell her why Rafe got beaten.

As for Traci, at least she gets to fuck a lot of guys but would have been better if she also prepared to buy a cat or two.

Traci played a stupid game, now in her senior years, she gets to enjoy one of her stupid prizes...loneliness.

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This story is much much 100x way better than the cuck stories since last week.

In the first paragraph, We-The-Readers hear about Hubby’s slow-growing EuroVacation Fund. At the divorce, WTR never hear about whether Hubby got to keep it, or honestly disclosed it, or tried to hide it and failed!

Giving each main character (except Sweetie2) a chance at the PoV is awkward as shit. It also suggests that the author sees her as a main character only for Hubby.

BTWay, the tequila intro (a late entry into the tale) is schizo! Sweetie2 is either a tequila aficionada (as her early comments suggest) OR she needs a mentor to learn about blanco, anejo, reposado, and maybe pulque & mezcales (as Hubby subsequently treats her.)

Rafe finds his happily ever after, rides off into the sunset and we never hear from him again?

Not even a little karma for him being an uncaring, unfeeling asshole?

Traci could have tracked him down, convinced him to cheat on his wife and passed along her STD before she got it treated.

Someone younger and better looking comes along and seduces his wife?

Something, anything

This is so trite, I cannot believe it’s from one of the better Lit authors.

Readers tend to confuse developments and characters they don’t like with a poorly told story. This is actually very well done. It’s just in a number of ways a downer. The one weakness: would a woman with a great marriage—including great sex—recklessly give it up just for greater sex elsewhere? Seems doubtful.

An ok story, that should have been fleshed out More

@Anonymous - wife gets off with no consequences?? She's forever lost the love of her life, several years of her relationships with her children (and those will never be back to 100%), and is living her senior years alone. Do you *really* think that further harm - financial problems, physical retribution or whatever it is you are hoping for - would make her meaningfully worse off?

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As for the story, well written and probably realistic, sure, but nothing that hasn't been done on the site a multitude of times.

Liked the title of the story, that's what Hooked me. The story held to that title. LOL. Rafe, in my view, had no skin in this (actually you made that clear) so why would he need retribution.

yawn. Not only is the story rather Matt Moreau -ish But there's a portion of the story which doesn't seem to make any sense. If the husband is so busted up over his wife's actions that he doesn't see anybody for five years why is he meeting the wife for lunch and having conversations with her? The kids are all grown so what is the need psychologically speaking for the husband to have these long lunches and subject himself to this kind of mental anguish and torture?

Since the wife and her lover worked at a Christian college, the husband should have turned them in and have them fired!

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There is an implied contact between an author and a reader. Put simply, the reader agrees to put forth time and attention in processing the story, and the author agrees to provide the reader a worthwhile literary journey. Sadly, the terms of the contract are not met by this submission. While the technical quality of the wordcraft is fine, the story line is awful. Traci is dispicable and Mike is pathetic. I suspect the primary reason they married is that no one else was interested in either of them. Big surprise that STD survivor Traci ends up collecting condom coupons from the Sunday paper while waiting for God in an old folks home. Luckily for Mike, older women outnumber older men. Since he was not abusive or mired in poverty, he was bound eventually to stumble across a female who would settle for a constant diet of oatmeal. Yawn....

Thank you for posting, Mr. 1957. Gave it a five. Write another please, Randi.

I wasn't sure if she was just trying to avoid talking the rest of the night or if she was trying to get me to go to bed so she could work out any frustration from being aroused all evening. Either way, I wasn't biting, and told her I was going to watch television for a while. I think she looked disappointed. omg finally a person that isnt a sexual deviant

Sorry Randi, Know your reputation on this site, but this is no five. Traci is made out to be a psychotic bitch asking her husband of 23 years to put up with her fucking around, and he is such a shlep he doesn’t date for five years and repeatedly meets the ex-whore for lunches? WHY! OH YEAH, he gets the happy ending and she gets VD! Rafe gets honourable mention as a porn star fuck buddy.

I knew I could never satisfactorily explain to my husband the connection that Rafe and I shared, but I knew Mike's love for me would win out in the end. I would start out trying to get Mike to agree to me keeping Rafe as a lover on the side, and fall back to keeping the marriage alive as a last measure. I suggested counseling. He agreed. that doesnt fit with mike's narration

Two weeks after seeing the counselor for the last time, I was in my bedroom riding Rafe like a stallion. I didn't know if Mike was having me watched, but at that point I didn't care. I had seen Rafe on campus the day previous, and called him when I got back to my office. He was more than willing to come for a lunchtime tryst. Yes, the sex was outstanding. if she can get aroused enough to fuck during a divorce she doesnt want that a good sign of bipolar

liked it but what i never understood about these stories is if the wife was that weak how is this the first time in 23 years that this has happened

@sbrooks,

You must be getting senile.

The punctuation was good, the grammar quite satisfactory. The story line was, unfortunately, lacking. Why has nothing fresh and attention-grabbing come from this writer in a very long time?

Cumminginsiderher

Sorry but that was boring. - like your bio, you one man woman

Sounds a lot like real life.

"A buck 85 for a bottle" u know thats a dollar and 85 cents right? when someone says a buck 85 that is what that means $1.85c

No likeable characters, even the kids reactions are pathetic. There is no sense of outrage or remorse. The timeframe for any revenge of a life well lived is way too long. Traci walked...

Sequence was out of order. When did he go to lunch vs. Meet rose? Nurses at docs office could care less how many partners. County or city handles notifications. Always.

At Christian college letting others know what happened would have got them fired....

Did she get hit by slut ray? Hate that type of writting. Lazy.

stupid man ,and a stupid whore wife.

I found it odd and incomplete. After Rafe dumped her like yesterday's trash, I would have expected her to react violently. Instead she walked away and lived alone, apparently forever, while Rafe suddenly changed his ways and got married and apparently had children.....yeah right.

Lots of avenues for more drama and more real life. Neither she, nor her ex-husband seemed to care about what happened...at least not enough to seek retribution. Makes no sense. Not when five years passes and Rafe is still walking around dreaming about his conquests.

Sometimes one never really knows what they have until they lose it. Sad but true. Story nicely done!

I've liked several of your other stories. This one left me just, "meh". The wife is a confirmed slut, the husband is a gutless twerp, the lover is a talking dildo. No person to ind remotely interesting and no story that has any meat on its bones. Better luck next time. (I'm shocked that Randi is encouraging you to write another of these? )

Traci really gave it all away for Rafe. Wonder if Rafe ever told his betrothed about Traci? Nah! 5* story.

Another could have been good story but once this little jewel was added in " I would start out trying to get Mike to agree to me keeping Rafe as a lover on the side" I knew it was going to go straight to the cliche woodshed and it sure as hell did. From her jumping right back on Rafe's dick at the expense of her marriage and Rafe dumping her for someone else.

Seriously, its the same story we've read a thousand times just with different names.

It started decently enough but then it became a bigly no.

Well it was true to the title, a slut and a wimp. Good thing women usually take lost puppies home.

As for the comment saying Rafe had no skin in the game.......Well if Mike was like most men ole Raffy would have left some skin in game. Not for using the bicycle that he was married to. But coming to his house to screw the whore would have earned ole Raffy a beating for the disrespect alone, not to mention playing someone else's yard. But, alas Mike was a man born in the wrong time. He should have been born during the woke generation so that he could fit in with the rest of the punks.

Now for the Goddess Karma’s Masterplan:

20 to 23 years later Rafe is coming home to find his wife made Oreo by two guys who look so much like his two sons.

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The good parts are that the cheater ended up alone and just as dumb as she was when she cheated. Also, the happy ending for Mike was great. The cheater's assumption was also there as always. Being selfish and totally absorbed seems to be the key for a fatal error, thought wise, in the cheater. perceived worth to their spouse. BTRH...

I liked most of your story but Mike is too wimpy and Traci the slut never got what she really deserved... total and complete destruction! Practice writing a scorching BTB to learn how to get tougher.

Enjoyed it, even though I had to wonder where Rafe got the Martian Slut Ray. It does seem to make the rounds! 5*.

I am guessing that you did not use a GOOD proof reader

3*. You toyed with a 5* but the characters were weak in this story.

What was the point of this “ Considering it was a Christian college”? If it actually was a Christian college, both her and Rafe would have been fired on the morality clause for adultery.

It just seemed unlikely after 23 years she turned into a super slut. Sure, she might have cheated but she went over the top slut.

Love it I hate cheaters (jaybee186)

Rafe ate Mike’s Pop Tarts? No wonder he was mad!

Well no Traci didn't love her husband "more than anything." She obviously just loves sick more. Period. Waste of space tramp.

I really liked the shifting POVs,5 stars!

"it's not like I was a drunk slut." Nope just a full fledge sober slut. I guess that ensured she wouldnt pass out on them. A petri dish like that are the exact type to avoid.

Mike, after a slow restart, finally found his soulmate. Traci found a curable disease, too bad it was curable, because the slut would have gotten what she deserved. She gave Mike some of the worst pain of his life. Too bad she didn't get the physical equivalent. She breathed air a good person could breathe...

A lot of commenters have suggested that if Mike had told Traci and Mike’s employer, they’d have been fired, but even a Christian college has to follow employment law. Traci was not Rafe’s subordinate, and nothing they did was illegal. And if Mike got Traci fired, he’d be on the hook for alimony.

Too bad good old Rafe didn't get what he deserved, or did he?

You reap what you sow you know.

I agree with Reed. The Pop tarts were a step too far.

Let's settle the weakness first. Why didn't Rafe end up in a wheel chair, or at least convinced his life was in jeopardy if he ever fucked that old whore again?

And you set us up with a couple who essentially share a Vulcan mind weld, well except his wife is a selfish arrogant hyper sexual immoral whore who lacks any respect for her husband, for her marriage vows, for her family, and of course for herself. But somehow the husband was essentially blind sided by a wife who is fucking some asshole in their own bed? For months? And then this sophisticated intelligent experienced man of the world becomes a hermit, for 5 years? Then remarried after 1 year of dating? At least you were consistent with the promiscuous slut's succeeding life style.

And that was the point? Dumb shit catches his whore wife, divorces, remarries, lives happily ever after with a younger more beautiful more virtuous and intelligent woman, while the fallen whore lives her life in misery, cheap sex, and venereal disease. OK. Thanks for the effort. I've enjoyed previous work more. Good luck with future writing.

You have written this story so many times, it makes me wonder what demons you are trying to exorcise.

Why do people feel the need to make ad hominem attacks on other commenters? Comment on the story, or if you disagree with a comment, reference it, and explain why you think it's wrong And identify yourself, so that your comment can be replied to.

All your stories are the same...

I'll have to agree with another commenter who ask where the old Hooked has gone? Way too many weak, wimpy husbands in your stories lately for my taste.

A very good story.Traci got what she earned. Mike too got what he deserved a loving wife to live out his declining years with as did Rose. Why any person think that a loving spouse would allow their mate to have sex with another person on a regular basis while staying married to them, is beyond reason. LP

Great story written from several points of view! This is one of Hooked’s better recent stories IMHO. Still, it seems like Traci never will learn her lesson! Five big stars ⭐️ for this one.

Excellent storyline! The cheating wife lives a lonely single life until she dies, lmao! Take that bitch!

And another wimp husband. What a looser he was no wonder she had no respect for him.

Middle of the road story. 3*

I read a few comments, they make me smile. There are thousands of stories on this site, many of them worth reading. Why would one read and comment on a story unless they found it to be one they enjoyed? I liked the multiple viewpoints carried forward in this tale well told. Well done! 5, easily.

Can never understand how anyone (Traci in this case) could be so deluded into thinking they "love someone with all their heart" and "he is my soul mate" while fucking someone else. It is beyond irrational. Mike wasn't particularly inspiring, but he got it right. Being crushed, but standing up for yourself is much better than letting a self-centered tramp walk all over you. Nicely done! By the way, ignore the idiots who think Traci is a "strong modern woman." She was a slut. Anybody who sees something laudable about who she was is probably worse in real life than your fictional character!

Ya did it again. You got me at the beginning and there was no stopping until the end of the story. You made a point that Traci and Rafe worked at a Christian college but never indicated what action the college took when Traci was divorced for adultery and it appeared that others noticed there interactions. Thought that there would be some action taken against two employees behaving in a most unchristian manner.

There also seemed to be an opening for Rafe's treatment when viewed with his motto: Mine is not to wonder why, just to fuck or die.) That sounded like an open invitation for an appropriate solution to his actions with married women.

@enderlocke77, saying something is "a buck 85" is slang for $185, the usage will make it obvious whether it's $185 or $1.85!.

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@Anonymous Re: Traci - You DO realize that Randi and us minions DON'T love Traci, don't you>