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AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

a lot of tell and not much showing. maybe too much adverb as well? first-person present isn't popular, but that's a preference of a reader. didn't strike a chord as erotic. maybe a little mechanical? not bad but room for improvement. keep writing.

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