All Comments on 'March Madness'

Sometimes, when I read the comments, I wonder if some of the commenters even read the story. Some opine as if they read another story and somehow got two of their 47 open tabs on six open browsers confused. Others, I wonder if they can comprehend what they read. Crazy....

hahaha kinda funny how today society some women think of this cause no god and feminist thinking they have to do a job so they can be equal to there partners but forgetting there vows and thinking sex and love are different and relationship only need the world love to be in it. specially they dont know the word love is.

Uuuggghhhhhh! No woman is that stupid. Fun read though.

A piss poor excuse of a mc husband. Yes he was hurt and angry and rightly so,but to actually send all those redeem players back to prison for something they didn't do. He could have just ended their careers benched them and be done with it but to send them back to the past that's just cruel. And the revenge he gave to her wife was so unfair, she was the one who Lovingly gave her a second chance help him when no one even bothered. And her cheating on him was also for them in her delusional warped mind, I don't condone her cheating or saying that they should reconcile but the way he treated her was after her loving him all those 10 years was too much. And as usual in this author's stories the douche mc simply runs away from his problem ie a) caught his wife cheating b) refuses to talk with her and be done with it. c) body shaming woman. I'm quite disturb with the way author's describe woman.

Great story except for the extreme revenge against the 4 guilty players. I think a more realistic revenge of just dropping them from the program and allowing what was going to happen to them in life before your intervention just happen. Maybe tell the story of sex and gambling so they are untouchable for blue blood programs but that's all the revenge that is required. Also the Dean beating the piss our of his wife was a step too far,she kinda deserved it but there's other options than that. But I love college bball so this story was nice.

You build a vary nice story, I enjoy reading them. Thanks for your writing.

Please start writing again.

Nice variation on the cheat theme.

I have to agree with Nitpic, too much trivia in this one. In fact I read more about basketball in this story than I wanted to read in my lifetime. Coulda cut three pages out just by saying he coached basketball and then moving on.

Huh? Made no sense why Gloria di all that. Is she schizophrenic? Multiple personality disorder. She went from the the love of his life and a superb wife to and hard working prostitute. Wtf? Not remotely plausible. Wasn't even sad because it was just nonsensical.

It made no sense that Gloria would do what she did. I agree with a previous comment it like there two totally different Glorias.

Good story. Might’ve been better if the author knew anything about college basketball.

These fucking liberal trainers....lol

Decent story,spoilt by its length.The author would be a far better writer if he shorten his stories by cutting out the trivia.

This whole thing was infantile and overwrought the MC was such a little bitch about the whole thing and if he had half a brain he should of taken the money and bet against his team at 24 to 1.

But of course he walks away with a moral victory😂 do you know what they call moral victories? That's right they don't its still called a DEFEAT

The problem with stories like these is that you need to make the wife amazing enough initially to justify the guy being in love and then make her stupid or cruel enough to cheat in such a bad way that it gives the guy no option but to divorce.

And since these are short stories there wasn't enough time for the transition to happen organically. Gloria just came off as two completely different characters.

Wow really enjoyed this 1 all except thr celebity name dean martin al bundy peg bundy. Not impressed with that but all in all a very good read. Yhanks

Good story

It could have been a unique story but the added funny was a distraction even though you telegraphed it early on.

Not your best effort but a very readable story, conflict among your characters could be cleared up and consistency throughout would be appreciated.

I gave it a 5, but of course it was over the top, the characters were caricatures and Gloria seemed to be two different characters.

Good story! But, Gloria started out at the beginning looking like a very smart woman. Then she changed into a stupid one. The path of Gloria... going from point A to point B didn’t seem right to me. Somewhere along that time line she got stupid and I think you should of tried to explain that to us a bit more. But I still enjoyed the story a lot. Laughed at the revenge on the four players. Thank-you.

I liked the story. I thought the revenge on the guys was a bit much, not that they didnt deserve a revenge.

First class story,one of the best I have read..How ever I am confused by the corruption remark,surely all Gloria was doing was betting on matches.

I Hope that Gloria has a Happy Life .. Because I am Betting big Time that the Coach and Molly will have a Great Life with Lots of Kids ..

Gloria was one stupid bitch

There's a lot of story here. One thing I don't think rings true: coaches make good money. The football coach at many state colleges make more than the governor. They could probably afford the surrogate. Still, it was a good story. Thank.

I enjoyed it. I love the revenge on the players and slut wives. I don't condone hitting women like the Dean and his wife..

Greed works on Wall Street... but it always shows up in the wrong places...I love this guy...he didn't let it fog up his mind and took the right stand...and he new it would almost crush him....but as we can see...he had real Balls.........

the story is well crafted technically. But I really think there ought to be punishment for any author who 1. puts the phrase "It isn't what it looks like." or ANY of its variants in a story or 2. has the MC talk or "think" about "male ego" or any other Soy Boy feminist idiocy after confronting cheating.

Overall, great entertainment. 5

As another comment would have enjoyed knowing more punishment other wives received

Names again funny

The wives slipping off really with out much description of their suffering

Way over the top. Ridiculous, silly, unrealistic. No basis in reality.

Loved it. An easy 5 stars.

Dean Martin i could live with, but Al, Peggy and Bud was to much. (Insert laughing emoji here) The story was over the top, but fun. 🌟🌟🌟🌟

You hit another good one for me. Enjoyed your basic concept of a small school basketball team with a nice guy as a coach. I enjoyed how you weaved your story about right and wrong. I always enjoy your stories. Thanks for sharing.

Not one of your best.

This was just fun to read. Appreciate the effort the humor & one liners that populate your stories.

This story was well written and fun to read. I would have liked a little more of Jim and Molly. That's just me, though; I'm a sucker for a solid happy ending. Very well done!

lest we forget all the un-sung, un-heralded, volunteers and followers, TK U MLJ LV NV

Next time Gloria phones Jim he should have Molly pick up the phone and say 'Mrs Turner speaking'. That should stop her.

but your best - yet

It would not surprise me if Gloria did sleep with the guys when she was young and hence was OK with it, it later on.

He should have gone ape when he caught her and the others. Further, she knew it was wrong as she covered it up = OUT.

Enjoyable.

but damned fun. Thank you for allowing him to have Molly at the end.

Apparently not being able to make a baby turned wifey insane.

annony!! He's an insane fag who sucks and swallows.

to being the best ones on the site. I wish I had a way of giving more than just 5 stars on some of these... coming back and reading your stories in the order they were placed on the site is really a blast! Some I have read before, but I am reading ALL of them through this time. Also wish I could go back and change my lower votes to be 5 stars - I have found a couple that I only gave 4 stars to on the original reading - my error!

Stang, another fine read. Loved the outcome and the way the story progressed. 5 stars again !!!

Too bad your attention span is so short! When my son was young he didn't like any book longer than four or five pages...then we found out he had ADD...have you been tested? I'll bet if someone gave you a copy of War and Peace to read you would have a heart attack! Stang is a terrific writer and please remember he does write fiction so the facts may not be accurate but they were never intended to be.

"He wore giant glasses that were held together with duct tape and converse all stars"

just how did the converse all stars help hold the glasses together?

lol

no college basketball program would allow unsupervised and unchaperoned after-game parties. There would be a curfew check, a bed check, and someone would know whether or not women were providing "incentives" to the team as an after game celebration. .

ergo: the entire premise upon which this story is predicated is specious, false, and untenable. in other words, no one should believe anything that was supposed to have gone on for the entire season without someone in authority knowing about it.

and, the bets being placed by Gloria? after a full season? for her to only have $100,000. but a credit line of 4-5 times that? NOT!

The only technically true element of this story is the mu-STANG. vroom.

I gave this 5* for my overall enjoyment, but I with Lit used a 10* scale so I could give it a 9!

I have a few points that keep the story from being more perfect, if that's a proper phrase, LOL!

First, regardless of motive, Gloria's actions were so out of character with how she was initially portrayed, that it is kind of disconcerting.

Second, assuming her motives were as written (and Stang doesn't give us any reason to doubt her), then she isn't the normal cheating slut just looking for strange dick, so MAYBE there can be some hope for reconciliation.

Third, the revenge on the players was over the top.

Finally, I don't see what she has to offer to merit Witness Protection. She wasn't involved with any organized crime ring, the most she could have given up were her gambling connections, and I find it hard to believe that she would know any more about them than the Feds already did.

BTW, I like the name play in Stang's stories!

"Somehow I was still looking at her panty covered ass. She had on the tiniest thong underwear I'd ever seen."

If she was wearing "the tiniest thong", he'd hardly be looking at her panty COVERED ass, LOL!

it started out building interest then you just drug this out between chapter 1 and chapter 7, so much so that I simply lost interest. You seem to have developed this habit with many of your stories, however I know you can write some fine stories with only four or six chapters.

You can do better son!

or walk the boards. TK U MLJ LV NV

If your going to burn the Birch, burn her. You started out gung ho but wimped out....better semi-burn than most of your stories though.I know my comments seen critical.....I did enjoy the read.

I don't get it. What the hell did she go into witness protection for??

I had to skip over at least half of this story because at least half of it is about basketball, even though the story didn't require it. A few paragraphs here and there would have done. Instead it seemed like Stang was trying to fill out the story with irrelevancy. Not everyone, in fact no one outside of the U.S.is even slightly interested in any sport played only in America. Baseball take note: you can't call something "the world series" if only one country plays it! Otherwise you could call the French "world champions" at white flag raising!

Back to the story. It was pretty dumb of the coach to accept Jamal's word that he didn't fuck his wife. He'd already lied to him. If he was a good guy, then why was he leading the nice, innocent Jenni to a hotel gangbang? Unless she was a slut too?

Truly far from reality but at the same time an entertaining read.

And I read for entertainment, I don't care whether others care for it or not. I am going to quit reading other comments, sometimes they irritate me by making picky statements. I only pick if you call the characters by another character's name or don't give us an ending. Thanks for writing. Not enough sex, though, LOL.

Probably the dumbest story I've ever read on Lit. I should have given up when you started using silly names as what I guess was supposed to pass for clever. My fault, it won't happen again.

Molly & Coach deserve a long time together.

In hell.

you at least had her with some brains. put her in witness protection. fucking the players so they would win. rofl. damn another 5+.

Great story as always, well, most of the time.

I know it will never happen because it just is not your stile , but i would love for you to write a happy follow up chapter to this story . Why ? Well it would show lots of people that you can write a story without a cheating , lying , heartless bitch wife or ex-wife in it . Thanks anyway .

Lots of tears in this one and it held your standards for stupid is as stupid does - she blew BIG time -

Too bad this one was actually about a not so selfish, stupid woman who just failed to look beyond the action to the impact. Gloria was one that he probably could have found a way top live on with. It is almost certain she learned from the mistake and quickly - but I get - only to well that too much had happened for him to get past it.

Well done piece thanks -

Maybe a technical after a 'made' three-point shot with a foul. Great job.

I'm not one for long winded comments. I liked the story. Were certain aspects unreasonable, sure, but it was a good story. Stang, keep writing. This story flowed well, and except for you mentioning the mustang it was great. LOL

Lazy loner was spot on. The wives are cookie cutter characters, the stories over long and rediculous. The punishments for the players were far too over the top and really made no sense. The only positives I took from this story was the fact that despite it was eight pages it didn't seem that long which makes a change as Stangs stories are normally eight pages but seem like they're eighty.

It amazes me that you can be as creative as you are in such a limited genre.

I don't mind the pop culture references in your stories. I mean come on guys we need to remember who is writing this stuff. It's someone who has a sense of humor. So many of the other authors get so caught up in the seriousness of the cheating that their bitterness overwhelms the story. Now that ruins a story. Humor rarely does.

And as far as stretching things goes, so what. If everything was completely realistic, how boring would that be? In almost every negative comment from Harry he gets on this kick about how things are not logical and therefore it hurts the story.

Get a clue, in real life people are not logical. Murderers are let go because the jury feels sorry for them. Boyfriends murder girlfriends simply because they are jealous. All in all the world is not filled with logic. It's filled with actions and reactions without any real thought.

Harry didn't agree with the numbers Gloria presented for her reason for cheating. Why does an author need to spell out every little detail. Stang is already criticized for having long stories; I disagree in some of the cases. Use a little intelligence. Hell, Ciguardian provided a reasonable explanation for the disparity. Stop being "The Scarecrow".

By the way FD45 your apology is all class, but in my mind unnecessary. Harry has been viciously attacking those who disagree with him for years. I have seen where he has trolled a thread just to make an attack on someone for making a comment.

I think if an Author is going to post they need to be held accountable for the quality of their writing; as if they had a choice on this site. But I think people who comment should be held accountable as well. That's why I don't like anonymous postings. At least Harry has always had the guts to put a handle to his rants.

This was a good story in a difficult genre. It was well edited and regardless of what the cowardly anons say, Stang continues to improve in many ways.

Please keep writing. If I don't find you here, I look on the other site.

You must have been sober when your wrote your comments. For the most part you made sense. As usual I don't agree with all of it but you made sense.

First of all, let me say that I liked this story. It was very entertaining, with a lead character we could like and root for. Despite being 8 pages, it wasn't too long, as the story flowed really well.

Now, the critique: totally, completely unrealistic. I know a lot about sports, especially basketball, and the whole set-up from start to finish was way over the top. It simply couldn't happen like this. For one thing, no college coach at any level has to go to the lengths this guy does to get players. There are literally hundreds of thousands of kids playing basketball in every city and town of every size in every corner of America. I live in a fairly backwater town in the American South and within a 20-mile radius of my house, I can gather up enough decent players to field a competitive college team. Now, some coaches at the lower levels of the game may scour the Wal-Marts or the military for roster fillers, but even those guys can usually play the game passably. And we haven't even talked about the players from overseas, many of whom are just as good as any gym rat in Philly.

And he wouldn't have had to teach the reserves on his team how to play on short notice. It doesn't matter what level -- D-1, D-2, D-3, NAIA or junior college -- if you can get on the roster of a team at any level beyond high school, the fundamentals will be second nature. Even a college's intramural teams will have players who can dribble, shoot and play reasonably coherent defense. So while our hero's scrubs wouldn't have won their Elite 8 game, it wouldn't have been 156-9, more like 95-56.

I also thought the coach's revenge was a little too pat. How does he just happen to have all the elements in his hand to ruin the players who'd wronged him the day after the incident?

For those reasons, I can only give this story 4 stars.

Perfectly written and woven story. As usual from your gifted pen!

I was wrong to make that comment and was, in my normal back handed manner, trying to congratulate you on a better then usual posting.

I'm not sure what you did to change things but I approve. Too many people will dismiss good (or bad) ideas because of bad writing and I don't like it when it happens to anyone (But mostly me)

So I am now in the loop and will avoid such comments in the future because I didn't realize.

and I'm from Ohio. Which, if I thought like Dworknob, would be worth a 1.

But I'm not Dworknob. So I didn't rate it defined by an incredibly arbitrary and personal system.

she thinks "viscious" is a word

Jerry Atrick made me laugh. Kept waiting for Jason voorhees to show up . It was campy but still a good story.

Nevertheless, I rated it 4 stars.

Dean Martin....wasn't that from a Rodeney Dangerfield movie?

Al Bundy and his son Bud and wife Peggy.

There may have been other TV and Film refrences I missed but it gave me a chuckle

I missed 1 pluss page Jim with Molly and natural produced children. However the 5 stars was pushed. Sometime SS06 writes too long this time I missed 1 pluss page.

Could have used some additional trimming. The fundamental premise is silly-she fucks players to get them to play harder? As if they don't have enough motivation to play their very best? If anything, the stress and potential guilt of secretly fucking their coach's wife would probably be a distraction. Doesn't really make sense.

Further, a coach, even a modestly paid one at a lesser school, could get 300 grand together pretty quickly. After making it to the elite 8, he could get hired at a school and get that much, at least, as a signing bonus.

Maybe the story would have made more sense if she was using her feminine wiles to attract recruits, to prevent them from jumping ship to the pros/other schools, etc. Or even to temp opposing players to throw games, etc.

But, I'll get over the suspension of disbelief, and accept the story on its own terms. I thought the suspicion vs. regret debate was interesting-I never thought of it in those terms.

I also enjoyed the humor and pop-culture references in the story.

4 stars.

"Now I have to start all over. And I'll be more careful this time. And you can go into witless protection and do the same thing. You can start all over again with someone else. You're still a beautiful woman."

I love that "witless"...

this is such a great story...but it two very important things...the morals and ethics in spots that are missing...believing in being true to yourself and most importantly....Al and Peg Bundy....ok I only said 2 but hey this is fiction right?

Enjoyed the satire. Also enjoyed the elements of an original story. Five stars for its entertainment value. Thanks for writing.

closet cuckeye recognizes the fact that you don't feed steak to cucks, give 'em hamburger. Mustang has obviously given up on improving his writing so feedback about how to get better is wasted; praise of his mediocre offerings is apropos.

Some of these people, who fancy themselves to be literary, critics are just too full of themselves. In fact, a goodly portion of them are just plain full of shit! SS06 is one of the best writers on this site and there was not a damned thing wrong with this story! FIVE STARS Mustang Man!

Stang -well done, entertaining story. Appreciate your tireless efforts every week.

You do know that the term "March Madness" is a copy writed term owned by the Illinois High School Assc.(IHSA). You may want to change the name of this story.

The overkill revenge was as bad as the movies, but expected. Other than that, nice story.

... especially for Gloria. Jim says "When we first met, you got really angry because I thought that you were one of those young girls who hung around with and fucked the guys on the team. Most of those girls were very young. You know they were in that 19 and 20 year old age group where they really don't understand the value of what they were giving away. But you're a thirty five year old woman who supposedly knew that when we first got together over ten years ago, if I wasn't interested in a young whore then, why would I be interested in an old whore now?" Gloria despised cheap sex. She KNEW it was wrong. And yet, here we are with this story. And it is never explained. You might as well say she now has two heads and just expect the reader to accept that as well. Also note that this is a failing of the author's own making. He didn't have to make Gloria into such a moral character to begin with but he did.

I also didn't like the attempted moral equivalence of Gloria's actions with Jim's concerning his team. Jim looked for society's castoffs and found a way to rehabilitate them. Yes, he did help clean up some of their messes but did nothing illegal or immoral. Just like every other college, he offered scholarships for athletic skills. Jim couldn't attract typical High school power players to his small college so he got them elsewhere. He couldn't find good all around athletes so he got niche players and forged them into a power team. In my mind that's Thinking Out of the Box genius.

He makes the statement that on his new team there will be no "Prima Donnas". Geez, grow up! That's a great philosophy for Little League when kids are all just learning the game but many Middle schools and most High schools want to win and use the best skilled players to do that. They do get special attention and benefits. Kids that are brainy get scholarships for being smart and usually special attention from teachers. Athletic kids get the same for their skills. In college, it's big business and a gateway to professional sports. There are rules to follow and as far as we know Jim followed them. You think that the typical college athletic star isn't getting pussy on a platter? Wink, wink. That also brings up a BIG question. WHY would any hot college star want to fuck OLD pussy when the college gals are sexy, ready, and willing, many of them no questions asked??!!

The idea that the rest of the team were complete incompetents was stupid. They would have had to practice with the others and the other coaches would have worked with them. I'm not saying they would have a competitive chance but I almost felt they were MM men, helpless and humiliated. Were they all little dicked as well?

I did like some of Jim's musings on expectations of a marriage but he never takes it far enough. He brings up questions but no solid answers. He doesn't kick it over with anyone else. Molly would have been a great foil for these questions. Does a man have a justifiable expectation that his wife will remain faithful to him? I'll bet Molly could have given a crystal clear answer to that! In the end, Jim leaves Gloria but we are left with the feeling that he wasn't strongly convinced that he should have, Here's a scenario, if someone you thought was your good friend shot you (and you lived) would you spend any time worrying whether you should consider that person your friend? You might puzzle over WTF happened but it would be clear that he is not a friend any longer. In Jim's case I get the feeling of loss over shattered dreams. But ambivalence about her viability as a wife? No way.

Valid points and advice/criticism but SS is in this rut for a reason: he posts in a category almost exclusively middle-aged guys who can't hard even with a bottle of viagra. Guys who not-so-secretly dream of their wives screwing other men or beaten cuckolds who wish they had the stones to change their circumstances. SS06 is smart and knows this and writes to his audience.

Virile men are busy screwing their wives or secretaries and check out this site occasionally to read about virile men screwing their wives and secretaries: it is like a club. Sad sacks have their own club and category and authors - welcome to that club.

I like Stang's writing style. And although some people complain that his stories are too long I tend to find them just about right to put some real character into them.

Sadly, this story was one that I just couldn't like. Part of it was that Stang is getting a bit cliche with characters, and part was taht even though I never played college sports, so much of his premise was just too far out for me and his AD and other athletic stuff just knocked me out of the story again and again. And a third part was/is that I'm absolutely sick of the blatant use of borrowed characters or character names. The Al Bundy/Peggy Bundy reference made me want to barf.

But the other 2 were the big ones.

First, the athletic stuff. I'm a huge college sports fan and so much here was jsut wrong. For any team to have a football team and be eligible for the NCAA March madness its pretty much has be play FBS level football. Which means that the main character would have been probably coaching at a Mid-American Conference school such as Eastern Michigan. These schools don't pay BCS level wages, but a head coach is going to be getting six figures. There is no way he wouldn't have had the money for the fertility stuff.

and that is before you consider that schools like that do see a lot of media scrutiny. Not as much as a BCS team, but quite a bit, and for the team to start winning as it did, there would have been tons of media talking about how a "mid-major" team was dominanting. The wife would have been caught long before the tournament, and definitely before the eltie eight game. Few mid-majors get path the first round of games, and just getting to the sweet sixteen gets them too much attention for Gloria's antics to get by.

And there is no way the hero would have been offered or accepted the AD position. AD is no longer a position that you expect to put a former head coach into. There is a whole area of study and experience for the administrative details that an AD will deal with. I can think of only one head coach recently that moved up to AD at the same school, and he had been preparing for that move for 5 years before he made it. It was a changeover that was planned more than a decade before it happened.

So that whole part of the storyline crashed for me.

But even worse were the characters.

Stang, you write 1 type of wife in these stories now. She's educated (supposedly.), loves her husband (theoretically) and a complete slut fo someone other than her husband (always.). But once caught she'll fall to pieces and use every cliche found in cheating wife stories. "It didn't mean anything" "I don't want a divorce.", etc.

The problem is that they always end up acting so stupid and vengeful taht I just can't believe it's the same woman you described the man thought he was married to. They are so twisted that it's actaully no longer fun to watch them get burned.

And of course the girl the hero runs into after that is always perfect it seems. I have to think back to "Butt Dial Breakup" for one who wasn't perfect, and you made her less than perfect by saying she was extremely passive during sex, which made your hero look like a selfish unfeeling dolt.

You need to break out from the rut you are in. The stories seem to always be the same now. Perfect and loving husband finds out wife is cheating, burns her without listening to her reason why and then moves on to a even more perfect second girlfriend/wife..

But the ending was fucking ridiculous. Al Bundy? Billy Bathgate? Dean Martin? Then to deliberately make the wife drop about 80 IQ points just to fit your cockamamie story was a story killer. Then to gloss over spousal abuse? He beat his wife and while I don't beiieve I'm adultery, wife beaters get no sympathy. Not only should she divorce him, she needs to send him to prison...after all, if a cheater gets their "just desserts" then so does abusive spouses...or are you just a gutless and cowardly hypocrite who gets off on hitting women?

The beginning may have been a bit wordy, but it set up the characters very well.

A very good concept for the story made it believable and interesting to read.

The revenge aspect in the story may have been a bit over the top, but still good to read.

A good smooth flowing or tempo to the story kept the interest in the story, and easy to read.

Thanks for the well written and edited story.

entertaining but highly improbable.. a story that really is hard to swallow. it just dosenot really make sense...

as usual with other loose women influencing a good wife. A good wife that was copying her husband by providing incentives to a bunch of Mike Tyson criminal types with atheletic talents. Oh I know that no real good reason for providing sex to atheletes now was given...especially since she would not do so previously. And as someone else said; risking her husband's job and career for life by betting on the games? A lot of coaches have tried to improve their teams with talented but troubled players, but two different Glorias? It seems there were as written, and one can understand the coach moving on. Of course, he went from drunken loser to college AD/coach on the backs of his wife and his betraying team. Anyway, the now self-rigthteous coach found another Angel waiting in the wings and the formula has worked once again.

I look forward to the next tale with a lot of appreciation for StangStar. He makes me feel self-righteous about my own divorce so many years ago. But how come I lost everything and had to start over in another State? I needed him to write my story!

I sincerely like most of your stories Stang...but I hope you are not a Rush Limbaugh type in real life. He actually believes all women are stupid and useless sluts and he says it out loud. I believe I would hurt him if he said it about by daughters. Sorry...I got carried away in my own self-righteousness.

Ron Wood - Old Marine Vet

SS, you've got a weird sense of humor. I like it!!! I'm still trying to figure out if naming the first head coach Jerry Atrick (geriatric???LOL) is a "bridge too far".....

I always read and enjoy your stories as they are well thought out and flow like they should. I'm looking forward to Thursday--or Friday--when the next story shows up.

Just like eating a whole bag of Cheetos, I always love reading a Stangstar story.

But once again, he insists on kicking down the fourth wall with his extraordinarily blatant pop-culture references. I was cringing with the Al Bundy reference (even through I love the series). I will be seeing an optomatrist to get my eyes loosened and forwarding the bill to Mr. Star because the Timmy Turner/Cosmo/Wanda had my eyes rolled back so hard that they got stuck.

Because Stang always gets me sucked into his story, when crap like that happens, it always messes with my enjoyment.

Now, you might think that my liking the story is the good news. No. That is AVERAGE news. I almost always like Stang stories.

No, the good news is that Harry has finally found an editor for his comments, bringing it from the incomprehensible to the legible. Whether that is a benefit or not I'll leave to the individual.

A great many who have left comments have tried to tell me why I shouldn't like the story. Having been one who all too often bucks the trend, I'll respectfully like it anyway. Were there areas of the story that were a bit contrived? Yes. Was credibility stretched to a greater or lesser degree at some points? Yes. Nonetheless, it was a hit for me. A good man was wronged and betrayed by everything in his life that he leaned on for a foundation. He literally lost everything he cared about. Yet he rebounded and came out stronger on the other side. Credible or not, it left me feeling better than when I started reading it. In the end, isn't that what a good piece of literature is supposed to do?

Timely effort but use Division III or the NIT, no way those of us who played Div I college sports can believe the plot. Someone said it was written for a certain audience (not jocks) that can slide. Not intended for sports gamblers either since we know research and mathematics, not shtupping, make money. The contrived revenge for each player also pushed the story too far. The audience it was meant for will overlook those gaffes but scaling back next time will make it more enjoyable to critical thinkers and experienced readers.

I'll give you an extra star just for having the 'Married w/ Children' characters in your story. LOL