All Comments on 'Marion's Story Ch. 02'

Enjoyed the 1st part and was looking forward to the next and it didn't disappoint hooked. Look forward to the next chapters

I love how the characters are developing they seem so real loving the story and how it is progressing can't wait for more by far an amazing story

Although some harsh stuff happens, it's an amazing chapter.

Personal opinion: ch1 said his girlfriend gave his songs to the band. I really hope that isn't Molly. Even forgetting the open relationship, just for going after April and not respecting his privacy in crossdressing... seems impossible to forgive and forget.

I am so sucked into this. I cant wait for the next chapter. Mmm!

xoxo,

Di

Run Marion run. As far away as possible from Molly!

Good chapter again ;) just hope Marion doesn't end up with Molly

can't wait for the next part, amazing work as always can't wait to see how the story develops

time to toss Molly and his sister to thee junk yard time to move on without them am sure Molly will go after every lesbian that makes her hot run as fast as you can Marion you don't need either one of them

Wow, he's got songs that wrote about Molly.

Maybe the other girls can help Marion relax and come out of herself

this is why families break up. NO WAY could Marion be around April again!!! I don't want to say ever, but months , years even. are you kidding me? sleeping with his GF more than once?!?!? GTFOOH lol

This was so bad my god... as soon the cheating scene started and marion forgive of molly i just could not read no more, so bad that i am out of words, this should go to fethis Or something my god so bad...

If you wanna read a story where the MC gets bullied and treated like shite read on...

great chapter, fantasy is so awesome, and the way you write is the best. it makes readers believe it themselves.

Not your best work.

The first thing I do is check to see where the number ratings are for one of these Literotica stories. If the combined chapters average less than 4.50, I’ll probably keep looking.

Next, I’ll consider its catalog and its length. Thing is, I’m starting to notice how some authors stories here - come on strong in the beginning - then they get tired and predictable in their Third act. Especially the longer ones; a very disappointing ending to say the least.

Marion’s Story however, is getting better with each additional page and chapter!

But from what I just read of the comments here so far, a lot of my fellow bibliophiles disagree with me. Believe me Cagivagurl, that’s a good thing. I always read them before adding own 2 cents.

Thing is, if everybody showers your work with high acolytes and praise, your shit probably sucks.

You’ve brought real life situations to the table, and it takes some people off balance, away from their ‘safe mind set’ were everyone lives happily ever after.

I know nothing about you, or if you have further ambitions with your writing, but should you cater to their small mindedness you’ll at best be no more than a ‘big fish in rather small, literary pond!

If a story is solid and well laid out; poor punctuation and grammar has to overlooked or forgiven - it ain’t like this is Random House publishing your story. Good work!

Ain't no way you wrote the lesbians using the T-slur on someone they suspected to be closeted trans. What the hell?