All Comments on 'Mark Ch. 01'

I'd really like to see this continued.

I really loved this. Just please finish your other stories too, can't wait to see what happens with Daniel and Mark

It's YOUR story, don't bother posting 1 chapter if you dont intend to finish unless you get enough 'likes'. Too many are doing that now, over getting into a story and it stops because there's not enough likes.

I'd like to see this continued

Please continue

Continue. And not only because we want you to, but because you have a good start here, and also because you will feel a better sense of accomplishment when you are done no matter what the rating stars say!

You also did good in your other pieces, so go write! Write! Write!

Diego may I humbly suggest that you continue this one. It has a lot of potential I already feel sympathy for Mark and the chapter ends with a hook that's surprising as well as compelling.

It is far more promising than your other works.

Andy Lodero, the school's quarterback, sounds like an attractive, nice guy with potential for Mark as well. Don't forget him! He sounds like he would be a good "catch" for Mark. Tall, big chest, hairy legs -- we could hope he has hair in all the right places!

But you need to edit your stories.

He work at 2 pm and mum was making breakfast and dad says morning honey to mum.

It's a small thing but detracts from the story

How did Mark and Eddie know each other's names when no introductions were made? How is Sara taking what's going on, or has she joined the bandwagon as well?

I really enjoyed this and I hope you continue with it. Eddie seems very sweet.