All Comments on 'Mark's Sister Ch. 01'

I can't wait to read the remaining parts to what should be a terrific story. Please keep on writing this story.

what a steamy story that seems to be rapidly building momentum. Can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for the read.

GOOD JOB!

Talk about leaving a guy high and dry, the gods will get you for that. Your printer will probably run out of ink for that.

good but you need a dictionary and a good editor waste is trash waist is part of the body do a rewrite and learn

I liked the story but there were parts that slowed me down and I had to re-read.

"My sister was very popular, and beautiful! ...

Lisa seemed to be on top of her sexuality; I mean, she knew she was hot. All the guys that came by the house would stare at her, wanting, and doing everything the possibly could to get into her pants! She was oblivious to the fact that all the boys liked her. ...

She was so confidant! ...

I don't know? I don't think the guys like me, don't think I am attractive?"

You contradict yourself so many times here. You need to work on that.

I loved reading this story, it is very good & you should be continued asap. Please write chapter 2 soon.

It really does happen. I never fucked my sister but she was the first pussy I saw and played with. I still dream of her cute little pussy which she showed me legs spread wide and a very wet pussy.

Don't put apostrophes in plurals (breast's). They don't belong there.

This story is so badly written..

Thery are breasts, not breast's. That goes for all the other plurals too.

They are breasts, not breast's. Same goes for all the other plurals - parent's etc. And don't put digits in a story, write out the numbers in words. So make it a seven inch cock, not a 7" cock.

Parents coming home brought a 5 star down a notch.