All Comments on 'Married Couple Fun'

The premise of the story is great but the spelling and grammar beg for an independent edit prior to posting. Additionally, the use of any one word/phrase constantly thoroughout a story sharply reduces the enjoyment of the reader. "Ordered" or some form of it was used far, far too often. Theme was great, introduction and set-up was good, progression and setting very good, but the editing made the story suffer. You tell great stories, keep writing, just work on the editing.

i liked the story, i just wish that the grammar was better. oh well, the story made me cum so what can i say!