All Comments on 'Mary and Alvin Ch. 06'

"He aren't moving out to the farm," he said.

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Pretty obviously needs to be "WE aren't ... "

(Nitpicking here, but it's confusing.)

(And I may have another comment when I've finished--that's how far I've gotten.)

Beautiful and sensitively executed, you have a special gift for prying open the human psyche.

It just occurred to me that since they started dating in 1989 and she was 20 then...with her dying @ 35 meant she died in 2004 in the storyline. That means Mary showed up about 7 years later.

Powerful chapter! You detailed Alvin's story about Bonnie wonderfully, and it careened from tentative, assertive, playful, comfortable, loving and finally to devastating; it ran the entire emotional gamut. So it turned out they started dating in 1989 with "Bill & Ted's Excellent Adventure"? Who would have guessed?

It's clear Angus loves Mary and you pulled at so many heartstrings in this one. A hands-down 5.

I really like your stories . As this one is long, I'll be back to it soon.

pretty good.

I suppose I should be sad, but my overpowering thoughts are that this is such a beautiful way to be remembered by a spouse.

That was magnificent. It ended too soon.

Beautiful writing, Melissa.

The sound of footsteps. Of course there were...