All Comments on 'Mary-Jane Avatar Pt. 01'

Your cute typo is then for than, a read aloud would likely have picked up on that.

There was another, but nothing major.

Quite like you're build-up to the impending event(s) and you have certainly developed the scenario well.

Looking forward to finding out just how well Mutant John's heart has recovered. We know you were too much for him before, but now . . .