All Comments on 'Master's New Toy'

What kind of psychotropic drugs were you on when you wrote this *thing* I didn’t get very far into this before skipping to the end.

This is DEFINITELY NOT BDSM, it fails on SAFE and SANE possibly around the time when she had all her teeth removed and underwent ridiculous unnecessary surgical procedures that no reputable doctor would ever agree to, I didn’t even hang around long enough to clarify whether or not it was consensual.

If any of this is a reflection on your state of mind then get help.

I absolutely loved this story and sincerely hope there will be additions made to it!

So hot...omg :))

trop de transformation.ou est la suite!

The only thing I did not like about this story is....that it is just too damn short!

Go on, write more and preferably longer chapters...please :)

Avoiding the obvious mislabeling of the story there are good and there are bad points. The good is that the writing flowed smoothly and the descriptions were vivid. I read from start to finish and was not put off my anything - a rarity as so many stories are written by people with no sense of story flow who have no clue about grammar. In short, this was well-executed and not difficult to enjoy.

The bad: Much of this tale was very derivative of other erotic horror. That's not a bad thing in itself unless you fail to add to it or make it your own. That's where you failed. Where the changes could have been highly erotic the story read like a laundry list of surgical procedures. Frankly, it left me rather dry. Additionally, there were certain changes that would have led to very unpleasant outcomes - infections and the like. Those were not addressed in a satisfactory manner and took me out of the story.

Also, the happiness of the converted slave was entirely unbelievable. From the start, and without any established relationship, the girl was changed. In the end she was happy with immobility and objectification. Even the most insane individual would have been mortified. Finally, check out how bras are sized. Your sizing made zero sense and took away from my enjoyment of the tale.

H. Dean

omgggggggggg, what a vision. sounds like a Bishop work of erotic art.