All Comments on 'Matt'

Hawt :3

Ending ruined it

It felt like you were so eager to get to the sex that your dialogue and premise felt rushed, clunky and unbelieving. Your main character felt like a hot topic virgin (she's never had sex even though *everyone* wants to bone her, and she's so smart but also edgy because nipple piercings) and honestly once you got to the sex it felt like it was written by the same hot topic virgin. Everything just happened to her but there's no great in depth description of how it felt or made her feel.

Finally, the last two sections were unnecessary and ruined the whole story