All Comments on 'Mature Women Love My Big Cock Ch. 01'

Nice! Love the stockings and suspenders.

ready for more

Yes, you are right JD, you really do need an editor. I had to abandon this story before the end of page one. It is a tale worth developing but is badly in need of punctuation and grammar checking. Hard to concentrate and that doesn't make the blood flow to the right places, if you know what I mean. I don't know how your other work stacks up, but in any case don't give up, and good luck with finding an editor.

Wonderful beginning and look forward to this being a great series..........():\

My advice is to work on run-on sentences. And...and...and... :) The first sentence of your story had at least 6 ands in it. I felt out of breath just reading it, and not in a good way. I appreciate you going through the effort, though. Best of luck!

Another interesting start I hope Mum and Aunt Jo get involved later 5 Stars

I love your stories please keep them cumming 5 Stars

Another great start I am looking forward to the next chapter

Reading your stories makes me so wet FIVE STARS

I hope you find a good editor and stop with the fragile ego: "please give 5 stars." Let the readers decide and learn to live with it. Good luck.

No incest. Slut Mom's are not erotic, at all.

Why did Sally say he's bigger than his dad?

This was a trick I learned in college from a professor who was an established author in her own right. Read your story to yourself aloud. You will hear the error or opportunity to improve the writing.

I went from a 1.75 grade to a 3.5, with just this simple trick. I'd love to tell you I was the only one she told and that she rewarded me for my improvement! ;-)

But those who listened to the trick and followed it - all improved. Try it!

BTW - A good story!

I'm glad I found a good storyline. Keep up the great work

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Good story and a four star rating from me you had sever errors not bad though but not 5 star quality and yes you need help in editing. But fun story keep it going.

Dialogue is a little stunted, in real conversations people don’t start each sentence with the other person’s name

This is a great story, but you've GOT to work on those run on sentences! It is annoying because it's so hard to read. Please work on those.