All Comments on 'Mavis and the Featherlight Ch. 02'

Great work! Looking forward to more from you.

I love the recent advancement in depicting frustration. Word usage and vividness of description has gotten better. Also love the increased lore we have for the world; the gradations between types of belts, and their specifics.

Lastly, I'll say that I am having a good laugh at the setting here: a locksmith in a relationship to a beltmaker.

I wonder if we'll ever get to read an actual depiction of sex between characters in any of your stories? The scriptures seem to only prohibit climaxing without one's spouse, so maybe we'll get to see a well-deserved orgasm or two from a character.

Once again, great work!

excellent

Should have made the case to the phone person that she was in the belt by mistake before giving them the wrong impression. If I were her, I’d call back later hoping someone else picks the phone or blow up the safe