All Comments on 'Max Burnage Ep. 03: A Time To Burn'

This is really signs fiction or fantasy and has nothing to do with anything close to Actual the ality or the love and wise category. It's a all than universe story where mystical beings with a special godlike powers are able to bring out Justice and revenge for women who cheat

This is not well done it's boring it's predictable it's high School is in its presentation

Love it! Thanks! I read the original by NTRMaster, and was thoroughly disgusted. I'm glad to see you put a good ending to it.

I really like this story and the previous chapters. Is there going to be anymore? Hope so! AAAA++++

Ah. I had a hard time suspending my belief at this one. I did enjoy most of the Max Burnage stories and the Justice stories but I couldn't really connect with this one.

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I somehow am quite disappointed that Terry could not do damage by HIMSELF to Tim and the ex-wives. I somehow had hoped that he gets to destroy Tim through legal and financial maneuverings (with the help of Max of course) and to wreck havoc on Terry's ex-wives lives (some help from Adrestia) by simply making them realize how evil they were. That making Tim into a woman is a bit much. But anyways, this is Saddletramps1956 story. Thank you author for the effort and sharing this.

more max burnage please i have missed these , wreckermaned

ST1956 to the rescue again!

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So...guess you didn’t read the banned chapter 4, did you? Long story short, guy remarried a fourth time, had a beautiful stepdaughter who gradually seduces him until he gets sent to the hospital somehow, tells his wife he was attempting to seduce her instead and gave him divorce papers in his bed, and ends up explaining it was all due to his archenemy messing with him one last time. She them screws the bad guy on top of the man and has the nurse, paid off by the bad guy, slip him something to send him to the other side. Seems like THAT might have been a better place to bring in the supernatural troops, eh? Max and Adrestia would have had a field day with that kinda plot! Still, not bad...

It's pretty much "out there", but you know what? I loved it! Takes the concept of Deus ex machina to a whole new level, and who of us at some time have not wanted to wreck havoc on someone who did us wrong? Pure fantasy and I enjoyed every word.

Sorry, not one of your best.

Too much emphasis in the supernatural. Terry basically sat and waited for revenge. A more proactive role would have been better, as well as insights into the thoughts of the three ex-wives. Also, the name wasn't Tim but Todd.

Finally, the 4th chapter was ignored.

Better than the other Max stories. At least in this one, Max didn’t use the deus ex machine of his “command voice” to beat the bad guy(s).

I don't know about anyone else but I keep trying to picture Adrestia. She must be the most incredible woman.

Good one, ST! It was good to see Justice and Amos again! Hope they have a new story in the future.

always love the fantasies.

Forced transition in a Mexican hospital is the new Mexican whorehouse 🤣

I read an awful lot of BTB stories on LW but this takes the cake, especially for the villain. 5*

Another great ST tale!

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I get tired of authors writing "big cock" twaddle. I also find it odd that the champion of masculinity makes justice a female. Schopenhauer is closer to the truth.

"The fundamental defect of the female character is a lack of a sense of justice.

This originates first and foremost in their want of rationality and capacity for reflection but it is strengthened by the fact that, as the weaker sex, they are driven to rely not on force but on cunning: hence their instinctive subtlety and their ineradicable tendency to tell lies: for, as nature has equipped the lion with claws and teeth, the elephant with tusks, the wild boar with fangs, the bull with horns and the cuttlefish with ink, so it has equipped woman with the power of dissimulation as her means of attack and defense, and has transformed into this gift all the strength it has bestowed on man in the form of physical strength and the power of reasoning."

If you've ever read feminist "scholarship" or statements by women in public policy positions, you can't help but be struck by the truth of Schopenhauer's comments.

There are exceptions, of course. Phyllis Schlafly is perhaps the best American example.

Every time I read one of these stories I think that such happenings can be real. I really enjoy all of your submissions. Keep them coming,

Oh my gosh Saddletramp! Thank you for taking on this story! I read the original series some time ago and they disturbed me greatly. I wanted to ask you to do your version then but never did. Thank you so much! Incidentally, that author has many stories that could use your story treatment. I had to stop reading them because the bad guy always wins and the injustice was too much for me. But anyway, thanks very much again for this and all of your stories!

Who can complain when a story has Max, Justice, and Dr. A? Certainly not me! 5*

Hi Saddletramp! I posted a bit ago about having wanted you to redo this series. Thanks again! I figured I'd mention another story that was super sad and ended tragically. That's "Last Man: Brian's Tale" by GeorgeAnderson. The writing was good but that story (especially the ending) haunted me for quite a while. I still think of it at times. Would love it if you could please consider giving it the Saddletramp Treatment! Totally understand if not, but wanted to ask. Thank you either way!

Thank you, ST1956! Always good, always entertaining! And always sharks! ... Kidding ;)

Maybe it doesn't "fit" into a "Burnage" story, but with Dr A all things are possible: in reading the story I thought that aworst punishment for those 4 people would be instilling a functional conscience in the guilty parties, informing them of the full extent of the pain and suffering they afflicted on the aggrieved, and letting them live with the ensuing guilt. I have to think that Dr. A would be pleased (an pleasantly relieved) with dispensing that kind of punishment. Perhaps the cheated-on party dies, leaving the punished individuals without a means of seeking forgiveness/relief.

It is good to exercise our imagination occasionally

Thought it was pretty good. Interesting take. I thought Tina/Tim would end up in a Mexican Whorehouse for a long time. Killing her off in 8 mo. was rather quick.

Good. You at least put a good ending to what some commented as the worst drivel on literotica

I'm glad to see one of NTRMaster's characters get what they deserve. He created some of the most frustrating bad guys and wimps. There are still one or two others you might want to give the ST1956 treatment. Thanks for the usual good read. When I see your posts I usually save them for last the day they appear. There are other good writers in LW but so many bad ones these days.

Thanks ST for your usual uplifting fantasy and a greatly entertaining tale, it is what you do and you do it very well. I'm delighted to see most commentators get that and enjoy your work. Top marks.

(I see HarryinVA has predictive text problem ....I think, can't really tell can you. Also note Mr 'I'm going to backslash all my critical moans to draw attention to myself' Brooks has given up slagging your work off....unless he's actually getting it now 😁).

Brilliant, simply brilliant.

Great story, i read the original and wanted to see justice. However, at the end of the story, it was so over the top so stupid that I kicked myself for reading it heh. Thankfully this is a perfect ending, thanks for the story :)

Thanks for turning the original crock of crap around. NTRmaster has that strange fetish of getting off on people being emotionally destroyed, stranger than fiction, even this fiction.

damn this story line keeps getting better, a bit more vicious, but better. No nitpicking here

Through fiction, everything is possible! Good job, as usual!!!

It was OK. Not great. Nor awful.

Had it not been for knowing the much better written background stories of the various recurring characters, it would have failed because the actual story was too over the top….even for you 😎 —- the asshole was too cartoonish…the 3 sluts were barely one dimensional….the punishment was too unbelievable.

Sorry….disappointed. Only 3***

Love your Max Burnage stories, the complete BTB if ever I read one.

Keep up the great work.

Scores a well deserved 5/5 for a highly enjoyable story.

You really need to take a break. Your stories are getting worse. This was adolescent low fantast btb revenge porn, like every single other story you have written. That is your thing and it's fine. Your quality has dropped. It's just not engaging because it's always the same in essence.

You HAVE written some interesting stories either interesting concepts. Even if they were in essence, btb revenge fantasy, the overall story and characters overcame the reader understanding of what will ultimately happen. When you fail to accomplish this your stories suck.

We ALWAYS know the ending of your stories. Always. It is important to make sure the reader cares about how the story gets there. Quite frankly, most of your stories over the last several months lack this. Not all of course, but most. Your first Houston series was enjoyable. I really liked Father's Justice. You definitely have the talent and imagination but your stories recently have lacked that something needed to override your "husband is perfect and wife is a whore, he will burn her to the ground and find a perfect replacement" expected theme. - starsong1977

Minor point - Why can't Adrestia simply teleport back when she goes to bed?

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"he didn't want them free to interfere with Terry's training." - How can they interfere? They don't know where he is, and couldn't get into the Camp if they did.

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The women were worse than Tim. He was an asshole, being true to his nature. The women SUPPOSEDLY loved Terry, and should have had his back, or at least not participate and revel in his abuse.

One of your better ones dude.

Another saddletramp epic! There is nothing more fun than a saddletramp story where Dr A and friends make mincemeat, ladies, out of the cheating bitches and assholes. This one was especially good, with a nasty bully and some stone cold cheating wives. Good punishments for the evil ones, and happy ending for the abused. Looking forward to the next one.

Saddletramp gets a way with a lot of outrageous plot points because he’s such a good writer, you know he’s fully aware of what he’s doing. I’ve said it before, his stories take me back to the 80s where we would often turn off our brains and enjoy the ride. Really enjoyed this fun story.

There was a similar story, but in that case the men were brothers. The bad brother dominated everybody, their parents, their wives, other wives and husbands, even Hollywood stars and big businesswomen. His pleasure was to psychologically and physically torture his little brother until he finally broke down.

But this is more science fiction than anything else. Where was Yoda?

1 star

Excellent !! I love Max Burnage !! Well done !!

One of your better ones I thought.

As always, a really good story. Thank you for sharing!

Maybe make him tranny with a 2” cock, with a body, face, and voice as malformed as his soul. Then make him allergic to most foods. I suppose corn would an acceptable source for carbohydrates, and violently ill with any other sugars simple or complex. As with everyone when he gets hungry his body goes into pain which never “numbs” away.

And he cannot die. Even if he looks like a 7 yo Ethiopian child in a famine he cannot die. Even if he puts a bullet into his brain or run over by an M1 tank, he feels the pain of the death, but the next day he’s up again.

Oh, and the only source of protein his body will accept is mammalian semen, which he can ingest from either orifice.

Or something like that.

To "starsong1977"

You're a fucking liar. ST has over 160 stories published, and they are quite different. If you took the time to actually read them, you'd know that. But then, you'd have nothing left to bitch about. Let's see you write 160+ stories...

Unrealistic crap even for a fantasy

Sorry but you can write so much better than this. *2.

Wow.

Somebody needs to spend the summer fishing.

Or go see a good doctor, one that likes to fish.

Issues!!

But thanks for making me feel better about myself!

Really stupid Sci-Fi Fantasy, No Stars!

LOVE all your stories!!! BTB is my favorite genre, and you sir are the KING!!!

The story line is getting old. I appreciate the revenge and retribution, but at what point is a man responsible for marrying or staying married to a monster? At what point is an intelligent successful businessman responsible for not protecting his assets against a spouse who intentionally or through mental dysfunction stops being his loving loyal partner?

At this point the stories are just variations in names, methods, and complexity. Not much new or compelling.

Still, thanks for the effort.

suffering till the end of days.....gotta love it

Thanks for another story ST.

Plus it's always nice to come to comments and see HairyCuntinVA get all worked up. I dont understand why cant just stick to reading the cuck stories from Ohio or HDK. Oh well. Keep writing ST.

This one its a mixed bag. I know the story of the original author, and yeah its one sick chapter after another, but if Adrestia was getting involved the best moment was at the end of the last chapter (#4 that it is posted in another site).

Take the story from here doesnt have the same impact, the MC somehow rebuild his life after 3 times, granted each time in a more modest way, but still that tell us that he posses great discipline and work ethics, its just the author choose to keep shitting on him, bordering on absolute incredible garbage.

Here the MC gets a handout, which its not bad per se, but after all he go to suffer, i believe that a better scenario for him was to get some of the retribution by his own hands, like beating the asshole face or take back some of his fortune and company and put some of the people who betrayed in jail.

Anyway, thats all what i was going to say. Thank you for share this story.

Girls get eternal punishment but Tim, arguably the worst character, only gets less than a year? You usually do better...

WHAT HAPPENED WITH TERRY'S FAMILY THAT DISOWNED HIM AND I HOPE THAT THE SON ISN'T LIKE HIS FATHER.

Your ending is better than the original story ending; but doesn’t even the score between Terry and Tim. Agree Tim got off easy compared with the ex wives. Terry received good therapy to move on

Good to see your stamp on this story. I read the author's 4th chapter and it was sad. I wanted to torture the bully for him

Good story, excepting the punishments. Tim should have lived out his long life as a whore. Similarly for the girls. Would have been good for them to witness Tim's punishment as part of his humiliation, as well as witnessing Terry's successes.

I don't get it ... he only suffered for 8 months as Tina? What happened to eternity like the three wives were experiencing?

The storyline is excellent, but what of the series, is there going to be more??

5 Stars on this one . I loved the humor and payback it showed . Keep on writing and I wish I had taken My Ex to A Mexico whorehouse

Have to give high ratings for the inclusion of North Idaho. I cant help but wonder if i have been near camp Rollins a few times

Great story, only thing needed is a POV of Tina Williams after the surgery, just to see what he/she went through and to see if he/she regrets anything.

Loved this story. Author did a nice job of fixing up a mess left by someone else. One item put me into squirrel mode. The story had Max clearing the chamber of a semi-automatic handgun and then ejecting the magazine. Shouldn't it be the opposite by ejecting the magazine first so no another round enters the chamber from the magazine?

It's not a biggie, Never used a semi handgun before just a M16 in boot camp. It's just opposite from what I understood.

Thank you for finishing the damn stories. 5/5

Far fetched < closure

Nato_

thanks for the story the NTR was so dumb by the end of it

Minor point: Since she can essentially transport herself, why can't she come home for the night? Besides coming to him in spirit, that is.

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I can SOMEWHAT understand the women to be taken in by Johnson, but I'm astounded that they can PERSONALLY take pleasure and amusement at Terry's abuse.

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"he didn't want them free to interfere with Terry's training." - How can they, when they presumably won't know where he is?

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"it was simply meant to strike a level of fear in Tim and the four girls" - Three girls.

Thank you for fixing this story.

“Nobody does it better

Makes me sad for the rest

Nobody does it half as good as you

Baby your the best…!”

5 stars

I have said this before, but every story I read of yours is better than the last one!! Thanks!!!

Loved it. On to he next one.

Just another great read!

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Top Shelf Series!

<Per your usual>

11//10!!!!!

Brilliant series, I actually feel jealous of Max.

Done it again 5*****

Another 5 BIG ONES!

NGL, wish there were more of these.

One small bone of contention: drop the mag first, THEN clear the chamber.

Yup, another good one!!! Thanks yet again!

This was quite a good fanciful story. Saddletramp has a wonderful imagination. He brought these characters to life in the story with great skill. Five stars for the story. Great job!!!

Excellent series. Thank You.

Really enjoyed the story. Small bone to pick, tiny really, to say that he will never be hurt again is a bit far. Human life is full of pain, especially towards the end. The pain of losing loved ones, of being lonely, of broken dreams, and health breakdown, too much pain in life. Pain only ends with death.

A fitting ending to a very good series. Thanks,

‘Tramp, I enjoyed it.

Five Stars