All Comments on 'Maya's Mission Ch. 01'

Who is Maya?

Sorry, that's a total typo! I've submitted a correction. Thanks for reading my chapter! =o)

Like the initial reviewer, I was thrown slightly by the Maya/Mika slip, although I was actually more confused by the way she wakes up alone and then suddenly Jay is with her. It might have been simpler to open with the previous evening's events, rather than insert it as a flashback.

Your detailed descriptions built me to a quick start. I feel like her husband now, hard and ready for the rest of the story. I look forward to more work from you.