by mondotoken
It was pretty good, but the break in the middle of the anal rape scene was a little turn off. I would have waited to the end or just before Humbert got clipped.
In an odd twist, this could easily become romantic.
It made little sense to kill him off. He just got a better hold of himself and gets hit by a speeding car. Really?!!? Anyway nice story line, I couldn't read the earlier stories with the dudes getting anally raped. 4*s. I would have given it a 5* if you didn't seriously hurt or kill off the kid.
He doesn't die.
the comments and get on with this amazing story already!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love this story. I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. I'm looking forward to it.
Chapter 08 was submitted a day ago and rejected due to text spacing. I believe I have corrected the problem.
Rejected again, I'm going to rewrite the chapter later tonight and resubmit it as soon as possible.
maybe you could put a twist on it. Like he goes into a coma and wakes up to her by his bedside holding his hand with total retrograde amnesia. She then helps nurse him back to health and introduces him as her boyfriend at school. Just for starters, but a member of the squad doesn't like it and trouble ensues. Www
I still want them to get together. If they can get past their mutual baggage I think they could work.