All Comments on 'Meet the Parents'

Very lovely & erotical story! I like the playfulness, the little jokes and the fact that I can visualise this experience, as I was it myself who was experiencing it.

“ … so just don't make a lot of noise and we should be fine." Fine indeed; this well crafted short piece was fun and wonderfully erotic, just like your other pieces. The reader is immediately drawn into a delightfully humorous yet highly erotic sequence of scenes that seem so real/easily imagined. Almost feels like “yeah, I could have been there/done that”. The initial scene upon closing the front door and the kitchen counter scene are perfectly scripted — brief, charged and so sexually teasing. Mother suddenly coming into kitchen is exactly what could happen, and maybe the father later wondering about noise — yeah could happen and does fit with the storyline. The strap-on element is erotically intense and sustains the sex, but probably could have been shortened without lose of moment — not complaining, just saying. Love the titles you select for your pieces and the anonymity. Your Biography doesn’t tell us anything about what moves you/your interests in erotic fiction, which is fine. Your three short pieces tell us that you clearly enjoy translating your imagination into creatively entertaining pieces.

We need a morning after, good story

... amazing story, imagination got me wet... but I agree with Nicole - "morning after" would be a great story, too 😉 LisaR.