All Comments on 'Melanie & Her Coach Ch. 01'

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Swewxxx 5 months ago

I little crude and straight to the point. But it's ok, so far.

Anonymousabout 14 years ago

Good but..

You should link it to the other in series, So that it's actually counted as a series, However you go about doing that. A few typoes and errors in punctions (Noticed at least one stray quotation mark) But the story is good, and without any glaring flaws.

Anonymousalmost 17 years ago

love it

hi it was fantasic. im a 24 blk female and i love these types of stories... keep it up

Anonymousabout 17 years ago

Keep writing

Ignore the "guardians of morality" that post their snide rantings. It's futile to waste time reading their posts.

Keep writing; there are many of us who do like this kind of FANTASY.

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