All Comments on 'Melissa Shows Off Ch. 02'

Please add another chapter

Keep going plz!

When Mike puts Lyssa through her paces when he spanks her ass and makes her beg to do things she says she doesn't want to, when he turns her into a submissive little slut.....it's super hot.

Enjoying the adventure immensely and can only imagine what might happen next!

Keep going, please?

I gave this another five star and do think it's better than Chapter 1. However, my constructive criticism would be the same as the first chapter. The scenes seemed rushed without much detail and a lot of repetition. The examples of this is from one guy to the next guy only was a few paragraphs out of 5+ pages and the closing scene of her drive back was one paragraph without much content. An example from Chapt 1 would be more details on all the guys she took back to the VIP room.

Might I suggest (for whatever its worth) including a lot more about what Lyssa is thinking during the moment and definitely include what the guys are thinking in the moment too.

I really do love how the club owner does have control over her and how she is progressively being more of a slut/escort. I can see this story going in many directions, like her husbands friends seeing her at the strip club, maybe a neighbor, maybe her husbands boss, or maybe something super simple as her brother in law sees her dressing very skimp while grocery shopping. I very much look forward to the next chapter. =)

Would like to hear a lot more of Mike dominating Lyssa...he can pimp her out....get her back on the pole, & make her tell him over & over the 3 things she loves...getting high on weed, coke,...& especially his fat cock

When can we expect ch. 3 Your best story and one of the best on this site. Damnnn

@oodaddyslilgirly damn that's some very hot ideas. I wish you can continue this story

hot, Hot, HOT!

Excellent job of creating individual characters and a story line that moves along at a good pace.

This is a fun story, and I enjoyed most of the first chapter, and a little bit of this one.

Separating her from anyone who actually knows who she is removes any investment I had in the story. She's roaming around a boat fucking a bunch of people who we don't know, don't care about, and she doesn't care. It's just a very long description of a number of sex scenes.

Granted, you write sex scenes well, but on their own they aren't worth much.

I don't remember when this was written, but I would love more of her escapades. I have heard that the way to make a hot wife relationship work is communication and trust along with lots of love. Jack and Melissa certainly have that. They will have a lot of fun going forward. HOT, HOT, HOT!!!

Very nice, 5 stars. I have always loved sluts, now I may have to love whores, too

(Sluts fuck for fun, whores fuck for cash). Like other commenters, I also like the domination Mike has over Melissa, but I don't understand why Jack doesn't get to take his wife anally

We need a continuation of this story, it's a shame that has only 2 parts

Could have been 5 stars, but, like some other authors, we were left hanging without a follow up with Jack, including his reaction to another ass fuck, not him. She’s taking advantage of him big time. I see a breakup in the future. Perhaps another author, if not you, could fill in the blanks.

Wow so hot. I just love hearing about them running train on her. I would read 100 more stories of lyssa at private parties. So hot and soo good