by Desikid
Written in some gutter language ....reads like a pile of road apples .....
It is clear that you have not had the benefit of a good education in English. If this is the best you can do- and I see no hope of immediate improvement- please desist from perpetrating such prose and providing it to the unwary readers.
This is a really goof effort,but it shows you dont know your stuff. It was she who was actually deep throating you,and not the other way round as you have mentioned !!
You just can't deep throat a WOMAN !!!!!!
I enjoyed the story.Because that is what it was a story PERIOD!
describe the stripping part of the woman and then her breasts and her pussy and your reaction when you see them naked.then describe the fucking part otherwise its an incomplete story.you started well but you messed up.write like:"i unhooked her blouse and her melons with firm brown nipples came into view.they grew hard at my touch.then i removed her saree and petticoat and i could see her hairy pussy.she was not wearing any panty.she unzipped my pants and dropped down my boxers and then squeezed my dick.........i inserted my disck into her pussy and ......." now use your brain dickhead