All Comments on 'Merry Christmas under the Tree'

Great story!

cute

cute story

ORD has a secret fetish for Cindy....

I wouldn't want to read "cute" every day, but I really liked the change of including the authors into the story. Definitely wasn't something I expected and an excellent way to defeat all the 1-bomb trolls and their vile comments. Thanks for the entertainment. Merry Christmas, to both of you!

Thanks it was fun. Totally unbelievable but hey who cares. Thank you both of you.

"Sounds like a Hallmark Romance movie. Are you sure I can't convince you to put it in Romance?" Asked Cindy.

"Nope, and I don't care if it costs me a star. I'll get more readers this way and I can get my message out better." —

This is the number one reason all the crappy stories end up in LW. I like ORD's version of a LW story much more. 5★

One Star. Bah, Humbug!

No, I haven't given it one star and yes I love Christmas a much as anyone, but it was the best response I could think of.

"Here's to the future now it's only just begun."

My wife and I got married on Christmas eve 42 years ago.

A light bit of fluff. Four solid stars.

JPB

Sometimes silly, outrageous, and fun is the right direction for a story. You hit all three. Good on ya!

i love that story, I love the imagination you writers have and enjoy that you share them freely. Thank you and Merry Christmas to you & Happy New Years and lets hope all the criminals in DC get what they deserve

Haha silly story, Merry Christmas…….. Thanks for writing,

anon holiday greeting: Happy Whatever!

Authors: thanks for what you do

Definitely, left field.

A fitting tribute to the true spirit of the season. Thank you for the humor and the meaning.

Cindy do like the drama. But this was very warm and cozy. I enjoyed. Merry Christmas

I agree with ORD that this story will get read more in LW. But second choice should be Humor, not Romance; l laughed more than anything else. Merry Christmas, ORD. Pm

WONDERFUL! You both should write more together! 10 stars!

You need to find a better way to switch between the sets of characters. It was a confusing read.

"10 Big Blazing Stars for a fun Fun Fun Read! Merry Christmas and Happy New Years to all, and to all a good night!" Great Writing, Great Story, Great imagination. Thanks, Buster2U

A fun Christmas Eve!

4

I thought it was a fun read and of course I gave it 5 Stars. Happy New Year, and Keep Writing. - Cindy

Cuck shit gets a 1 ..... it bored me by the 4 or 5th paragraph. You are a good writer. And Cindy TV..well I like what she puts out . If a bitch needs a BTB she will do the burn just right gave it a four cause I finished reading it

Odd at best

Good one. Merry Christmas.

How come...

...there's never any stories about Ramadan or Hanukkah?

Errrr

Different.

Original.

I might encourage trimming unnecessary words to make the sentences and paragrphs stronger. "Kristy pushed Kris to take the note from inside it, which he did and read it." might eliminate the word "it," and read: "Kristy pushed Kris to take the note from inside, which he read." No need to say the note is inside it, because inside already implies inside of "it." Likewise, no need to say he did, because you're showing him doing it, or that he read "it," because you're already showing him reading, and this implies "it."

"On top of the babies was another note, which Kris took and read outloud." might be reduced slightly, "On top of the babies was another note, which Kris read aloud." No need to say Kris took, because it's implied by Kris reading the note. Little things, but make for stronger, cleaner sentences.

"As soon as Kris looked at Kristy, they heard babies crying in the guest bedroom." No need for "soon as," because unless there was an unexpected hour delay between Kris viewing Kristy, it's implied simply by use of the word "As." Rather than "looked," a stronger verb might convey more with a single word; glanced, gazed, etc. No need to say that they heard babies crying, if one simply states that babies cried from the guest bedroom. Their hearing it is implied, including the reference, and then by Kris and Kristy responding to the sound. Again little things though the story that make the sentences and paragraphs stronger.

You should listen more closely to Cindy. There is such a thing as too eccentric and too over the top. Too many asides became too distracting and an otherwise potentially really funny story just got continually sidetracked and became very difficult to read. Good idea, loved the no cheating, and gave it an extra star for that. Thanks and Merry Christmas!

That was unusual and a bit of fun. Merry Christmas.

Brilliant. A truly different story and a wide who actually loves her husband in Loving WIVES for once! Merry Christmas to you both.