All Comments on 'Michelle's Metamorphosis Pt. 01'

There are lots of possibilities for how couples can deal with problems. This unique way of dealing with timidity and low self-esteem is exciting. Hubby is in for a wake-up call when wifey gets home.

Being a bit of an exhibitionist myself, I can relate to the erotic 'woo-hoo' of taking chances, especially in a dark park in the middle of the night. Not every adult is home in bed at odd hours. Some are grabbing a little gusto, even in the counseling they take. I love the outfit she's wearing, too. So HOT :)

I didn't read The Consultant. I like where this is heading!

I read the story as far as the husband saying he trusted the doctor after his wife told him she was to meet a strange man and it sounded fishy. What husband in his right mind would not have the safety of his wife as his first thought? What basis did he have that instilled such trust in someone he'd only met once? He comes off incredibly naive and stupid.

Once that kind of implausibility is introduced into the story it's hard to recover with any sense of a credible plot.

Sorry, but you asked for constructive criticism.

different people but the exact same plot nothing new.

And not a enjoyable trick at that, no thanks.

... Trust me, if you read this story, you've read "The Consultant".

if this develops nicely or not. The openings are always easy, to garner interest and set up dramatic tension. Resolving the conflict is always harder and distinguishes the true talent from the pikers.

Good luck in your endeavor.

a frigid prude to hubby but no compunction about slutting it up and begging an anonymous caller to throw her a bone.

Somewhere in the editing process, you should have caught the fact that you don't quite get how to to use the words "bear", "bore", "bare", and variations thereof. I know it's a homophonic conundrum, but their misuse is one that really is distracting to the reader.

She turned from a woman into a whore.