All Comments on 'Midnight Movie Club Ch. 04'

Just a couple of observations: "Must you turn this dormitory into a decedent whorehouse!"

I think the word you want is "decadent". "Decedent" means something quite different.;)

"Eleanor's white blouse skirt hung from one toe."

What is a blouse skirt? Those are two very different garments.

"Cole watched Alexander and I bang, he didn't join in."

Grammar. "Alexander and me." If you aren't sure which to use just take the other person out of the sentence. You wouldn't say, "Cole watched I bang," would you?

You need a period after "bang."

Maybe slow down and do a little more proofreading? I find reading my work out loud helps me catch mistakes.

Thank you for pointing these errors out! I do try my best to proofread and catch those errors, but there are always one...two...seven or eight...that slip through the cracks. I'll take your advice and try reading it out loud the next time I submit a story!