by SuperWriter
...the ending was pretty abrupt. There is a LOT more that you could do with this, and I hope you give it the ol' college try. You'll get a higher rating for the next chapter, if there is one.
Attractive people are attracted to each other no matter their bloodlines. Only natural it ends in sex.
very sexy. can't wait for the next few chapters. 5 stars! BUT "SuperWriter"? really? i've always enjoyed modesty!
It took a little bit to get used to. Once I got into the story more I started to understand and enjoy it very much.
Looking forward to the next chapters.
This is a very good start towards what could be a very good story. Iβm looking forward to seeing the next chapter, I hope itβs as good as this one was.
I liked it. Sexy and cute. However using the word "Stench" to describe his penis smell was a bit crude /a turnoff. Thankfully it was only at the begining.