All Comments on 'Misplaced Aspirations (750 words)'

Dumb cunt

Just another status seeking wife. Why would she want you to wear a suit rather than a hardhat? She's NOT at work with you. As long as you're making decent money and enjoy your job, who cares? Should have gone after Jason but 750 words has its limits.

She sounds like an all too typical husband!

5

Seems Mandy preferred style (Jason) over substance (her husband). That didn't work well for her, did it?

Ouch!

Not sure what a bluff guy is.

Different. I liked it! Keep it up, please.

Nicely done. He's smart to get away from such a selfish stupid slut who says fucking another guys is "helping."

A generous four. Really only a three-plus, but well-written, and got your point across in 750 words. There will be the usual complaints about "what happened next?" and if this was a regular story, not a 750, I'd agree, but it IS a 750.

Wife is a shallow moron slut.

The story lives up to your moniker. Corny. 2*

Good to have you back in LW. Enjoyed the 750.

You were building up potential, but then dropped out of the race early. Very disappointing.

She won t miss you... she has early onset senility

Great 750 story.

740 words too many. Ugh.

Pretty good for a 750 word story. A rare 750 word four stars.

sorry, I hate 750 word stories. Most feel like an outline of what could have been...

I would like to have known the details to this story.

Great short story, funny ending loved it 5*

Well told but just didn't quite fit the 750 word boundaries if told fully - 4*

1. This is an erotic story site. Try writing an erotic story next time.

2. Real people don’t act like the wife character in this story.

OK….so call this “Portrait of an Idiot”

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3 ***

Dumb bitch.

Now she'll be a divorced dumb bitch. Probably with an STD.

Completely silly and unbelievable, but it isn't supposed to me. Loved it. 5*

"sorry, I hate 750 word stories. Most feel like an outline of what could have been..."

Then don't read them.

The plot outline is good. As a 'story' no, but that's not really your fault. 750's are usually just frustrating for the reader and probably hell on the author. I blame the format, and would like to see this turned into a real story.

Good story. REALLY dumb wife. Seems a lot of them are. That’s what happens when you let your gonads do the “thinking”, guys!

Too short, not complete.

All things shiny aren’t made of gold

This story has more tags than stories that are 20 times longer! The story was good for the length, but like others it would have been better with more meat on the bones, aka 20 times longer! 4*

Trouble with 750 words is detail, there never is any, I can't rate any 750 words they do not contain enough to even spark a single cell in the brain

Half way through, I knew what your closing words would be, lol. Thanks for 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE BLAZING NOVA STARS!

I gave you 5 stars, but I still don't like these 750 word stories. To me, it's cheating. A full story, say 3 Lit pages or more, requires dialogue, emotions, more detailed settings, improved characterizations, etc. It takes a lot more work and skill, meaning more chances to impress... or bore... your readers.

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People make allowances for a 750 word story that they'd never make for a real story. It's like someone offering you a lick of their ice cream cone. Just enough to taste, maybe enough to describe the flavor, but certainly never enough to enjoy. So the 750 word story isn't really a challenge, it's more escapism from the rigors of writing for real, in my mind.

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I'm not belittling your work, just trying to encourage you to move along now. Thanks.

Get rid of her cheating ass, she can't be that stupid.

Cute story, my wife and I had a good laugh!

Mandy was scatterbrained, birdbrained, ditzy, featherbrained and whored herself out for nothing!

Nice writing and very unique!

Seemed more like an outline for a story.

He got what he married, so he got what he deserved. Maybe next wife will have a better brain than body. Mandy won't even remember his name after a few years of other men with better cock. Thanks for the effort.

For a 750 word, short and to the point, 4 stars.

All that was missing was the asshole of being fired, and having some abrasions, for a robbery suffered.

Honestly... why did he married such an idiot?

Sometimes, bad things happened to people that simply asked for it...

Mandy had selective hearing loss in this case

750 word maximum is a tough nut to crack. You crushed it. 5 stars

4 stars. Better then most 750 word stories as its coherent but like most of them this would have worked far better as a longer story. Details matter.

Great story.

Ed

Good story. Easily worth five stars ⭐️.

Another dumb wife story.

I could had been better but the story went too fast and didn't end properly ****

Cute!

I liked it for a short paragraph masquerading as a story. Put some meat on its bones and you could have a winner.

Far too many of the cheating stories are driven by a wife too ignorant for words. That ending was really rough though, your husband doesn't even let you dance with someone else but you calmly tell him you slept with someone else for him. It's just too... stupid.

Some intriguing components but the brevity forced by the 750-word limit turned it into a flop. From author's description I liked Mandy. She was a ditz. But still I hadnt enough info to get why she was OK abut breaking the slow dance rule, and fucking the new guy thinking that would help his boss's boss. Was she that stupid?

Sequel?

LOL

She had to be very blonde.

Clever story. Perhaps some of the anonymous reviewers should realize how hard it is to express a complete thought in 750 words. This was a clever concept expressed very well. Good ending.

Cute, funny, sweet. Not really Femdom agitprop, but still…

Don't generally enjoy the 750 words stories but this one had everything I'm looking for in a story.

26thNC hit it on the head. I loved it. Good luck, buddy. The Bear approves. Only gave it 4 stars, because it was too short, and the guy lived.

The BEAR

Again, well done. Like FireFox I generally avoid 750 word projects, but do read a few. This was a good one. It had enough nuance to feel complete and the finale was adroitly done. Full marks. It would have made a good longer story, by the way.

All that needs to be said. 5 stars.

I hope that they don’t have any children. I’d hate to think about another generation of idiots like her!

ZK

Not the only problem with her

Haha. Loved that one. Perfect short, didn't leave me wanting though you could certainly stretch it out into a longer story. Perfect as is!

Dumb bitch Mandy hahaha

Excellent.

2 words--- Ooohh shittt!!! The next to last line was the kicker, & not expected. 4 stars Bob

Hahaha.....what a dumb bitch Mandy is

What was the point of the story? I’ve never said anything bad about an author and I won’t start now, but the only good thing I could find was it was only 750 words it wasn’t bad but what was the point?

Unlike some, I don't mind 750s, but I prefer that they be part of an actual event, To take a story that could be a nice flash at 1250, then cut it down to 750 "just because" is foolish.

Love this! All about misplaced expectations. Well done!

Who cares if she was good at listening 😒, hit her in the back of her head with a newspaper and point to the front door 😁

sorry, 3 stars. She basically didn't suffer AT ALL. No downside whatsoever. I try to let 750s have some slack, like not requiring happily ever after for MC, but this particular one was at best "meh".

no real ending to it

;-) Thanks for a fun read! Good job!

Good...no dallying around. Divorce her stupid ass. But the interloper only lost his job with no consequences for going after a married woman and breaking up a marriage? No broken nose and jaw, kneecaps, ribs and smashed balls and cock rendered a useless appendage never to be used again.

5 stars

Too many stupid people especially women think wearing a suit to work means you make more money then the guy that doesnt.

@ RODZZZ 13 days ago. Did you not think that 'the Lads' wouldn't go and have a quiet word with Jason? One he wouldn't enjoy and which might make him think twice about playing games in future.

The problem with her wasn't she didn't listen... she was just really really stupid🤭