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All Comments on 'Mistress Karinda Directs'

by Icetiger1227

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Convulted Sentences

I really like the content of the story. The style not so much. Your sentences are rather confusing and not to mention long. Thinking back to English classes I recall a teacher of mine warning against just that. Rightly as I notice now.

You have good ideas, just work on the style.

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